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icarusExpected differences between Seattle Central and UW:
- Glamour of this time-honored campus
- More homework
- Better resources (libraries, technology)
- More specialized classes
Actual differences:
- Long walks (I am going to have buns of steel)
- Heavier textbooks (and be built like a small tank, or at least burro)
- Big puddles, invisible until you step in them (hiking boots it is)
- No elevators in old buildings (oh yeah, I'm getting in shape)
- More homework. Much, much more.
- Better libraries
- Worse computer services (congrats to Central's techies)
- Classes so specialized they gleefully give new meaning to the word obscure.
In fandom news, I recommend (if you can) getting your stories on the Sugar Quill. The reviews they give are detailed and beautiful. The trick is to have your fic ready and hit "Send" the millisecond their next opening is available.
The Metronome looks to be a hit.
How well you depict the bored adolescent Lucius, bright, but not excelling at anything, looking for 'freedom' from his family. I love his takes on Narcissa and Bellatrix. And his baseborn sidekick Avery. And the use of music, especially that diabolical organ. Was it something Tom found, and was he using Lucius to determine its powers? Or did he invent it himself? It makes me think strangely of Every-Flavor Beans, but this is an Every-Sensation keyboard. Wicked!
Wooooooooow.
There are so many things about your story that I love. I've never read a young Lucius fic before, but suddenly he's really interesting. Riddlemort is frightening, mainly because he seems human but isn't really. The pain and pleasure endurance test is an especially creepy addition. Odd as it may sound, your word choice is my favorite part of your writing-- it's really refreshing to read rare, almost archaic words that are usually very difficult to use unobtrusively. It's also nice to know that chiaroscuro is not a term my English teacher made up :)
I'm sort of hoping that you plan to do more with the intricate world of Lucius Malfoy that you've created ::crosses fingers::
I'm not generally a big Malfoy fan, but this fic really made me sympathize with Lucius, something that's never happened before! His character is wonderfully drawn; you manage to make teenage Lucius believably like canon's adult Lucius, while still making him appear sympathetic and vulnerable. I also like the unique way you treated his impending marriage to Narcissa, by making Bellatrix the sexy one and Narcissa the skinny kid who still has to grow into her looks. And Tom Riddle is perfect. He's intelligent, persuasive, and the perfect amount of evil, and his testing Lucius with the organ is completely believable and chilling. Nicely done!
Wow. Just - WOW. This is an EXCELLENT Riddlefic, and a brilliant insight into Malfoy. I love the use of the music, and the cursed organ sensations were downright creepy. But really, it's the irony of what Malfoy asks of Riddle that just makes the story. He binds himself to slavery to gain the shadow of freedom. Incredible.
Wow, this is a beautiful work! Beautiful language. I loved the part where he was compared to a horse, and I enjoyed the description of Tom's cave and the sensations. Very unique and intriguing.
I absolutely loved this story; it was incredible and very realistic in all aspects. I haven't read a lot of Lucius when he's younger, but you do a great job in using his character well in this story.
The only thing I would question about his character is that I don't think he would refer to his mother by "mummy". It's possible he would use "mum," but as for a Malfoy, (especially one at sixteen years of age), I think it would be more in his character to use "mother". In the books, for instance, Draco never uses anything but "mother" and "father," and I think it probable that Lucius would have refered to his parents in the same way.
Other than that, I thought you did a great job in making it believable that this sixteen-year-old could become the Lucius we all know from the books. Nothing was too off or unrealistic. I congratulate you on that.
My last comment is going to say just how much I LOVED the organ! It was a fabulous idea, and incredibly creepy; it really helped add to the overall mood and feeling of the story. Your portrayal of Tom/Voldemort (whichever one he needs to be refered to in this), was also wonderful. I congratulate you on an excellent story.
Signed,
Dark Princess
Everything you want in the world... for a song. What a fantastic concept, and how well you write it! It's amazing to watch Lucius change from something very like a Draco to the Lucius we now know. The traps that Voldemort lays.. they're brilliant. I could just see the web of deceit closing in on Lucius. And when we hear him say:
"Lord Voldemort had not taken Avery into his confidences. Lucius hid that knowledge jealously like a new-found prize."
We know then that the transformation is complete, that Voldemort has succeeded in what he set out to do. And yet in saying:
"The truth hit Lucius like a blow. Yet there was no judgment on Tom's face, nor even a trace of disappointment. ...Tom neither praised nor condemned him, the Malfoy heir who was not permitted to be average. ... Legs sprawled out like a child's, Lucius looked up at Riddle in gratitude, feeling strangely clean. "
you show us a part of Lucius that is somehow worthy of respect, scum though we know him to be from the books. His character as you've drawn it is fascinating; not even JKR's Lucius has made me want to know more about him (probably because he's not the main character, but still), and you have.
This is a magnificient story, the best I have read in a long while. I won't compare you to other fanfic writers, because I don't think that would be a compliment to you. You have a way with words that transcends the fandom level of writing. I am really looking forward to reading your other work.. and I'm recommending this story on my blog.
You capture a haunting, spooky imagry with this. Very interesting take on Malfoy; most stories I've read have him joining the Death Eaters because of the cause (ie-- eliminating non-purebloods). But this take on Malfoy's meeting -- and his requests/wishes -- is very believable. Using the organ and song as a test -- that was bloody brilliant, and chilling.
*Icarus rolls happily in Gen reviews.*
Chilling. A convincing rendition of a first meeting between master and new-found slave.
- Glamour of this time-honored campus
- More homework
- Better resources (libraries, technology)
- More specialized classes
Actual differences:
- Long walks (I am going to have buns of steel)
- Heavier textbooks (and be built like a small tank, or at least burro)
- Big puddles, invisible until you step in them (hiking boots it is)
- No elevators in old buildings (oh yeah, I'm getting in shape)
- More homework. Much, much more.
- Better libraries
- Worse computer services (congrats to Central's techies)
- Classes so specialized they gleefully give new meaning to the word obscure.
In fandom news, I recommend (if you can) getting your stories on the Sugar Quill. The reviews they give are detailed and beautiful. The trick is to have your fic ready and hit "Send" the millisecond their next opening is available.
The Metronome looks to be a hit.
How well you depict the bored adolescent Lucius, bright, but not excelling at anything, looking for 'freedom' from his family. I love his takes on Narcissa and Bellatrix. And his baseborn sidekick Avery. And the use of music, especially that diabolical organ. Was it something Tom found, and was he using Lucius to determine its powers? Or did he invent it himself? It makes me think strangely of Every-Flavor Beans, but this is an Every-Sensation keyboard. Wicked!
Wooooooooow.
There are so many things about your story that I love. I've never read a young Lucius fic before, but suddenly he's really interesting. Riddlemort is frightening, mainly because he seems human but isn't really. The pain and pleasure endurance test is an especially creepy addition. Odd as it may sound, your word choice is my favorite part of your writing-- it's really refreshing to read rare, almost archaic words that are usually very difficult to use unobtrusively. It's also nice to know that chiaroscuro is not a term my English teacher made up :)
I'm sort of hoping that you plan to do more with the intricate world of Lucius Malfoy that you've created ::crosses fingers::
I'm not generally a big Malfoy fan, but this fic really made me sympathize with Lucius, something that's never happened before! His character is wonderfully drawn; you manage to make teenage Lucius believably like canon's adult Lucius, while still making him appear sympathetic and vulnerable. I also like the unique way you treated his impending marriage to Narcissa, by making Bellatrix the sexy one and Narcissa the skinny kid who still has to grow into her looks. And Tom Riddle is perfect. He's intelligent, persuasive, and the perfect amount of evil, and his testing Lucius with the organ is completely believable and chilling. Nicely done!
Wow. Just - WOW. This is an EXCELLENT Riddlefic, and a brilliant insight into Malfoy. I love the use of the music, and the cursed organ sensations were downright creepy. But really, it's the irony of what Malfoy asks of Riddle that just makes the story. He binds himself to slavery to gain the shadow of freedom. Incredible.
Wow, this is a beautiful work! Beautiful language. I loved the part where he was compared to a horse, and I enjoyed the description of Tom's cave and the sensations. Very unique and intriguing.
I absolutely loved this story; it was incredible and very realistic in all aspects. I haven't read a lot of Lucius when he's younger, but you do a great job in using his character well in this story.
The only thing I would question about his character is that I don't think he would refer to his mother by "mummy". It's possible he would use "mum," but as for a Malfoy, (especially one at sixteen years of age), I think it would be more in his character to use "mother". In the books, for instance, Draco never uses anything but "mother" and "father," and I think it probable that Lucius would have refered to his parents in the same way.
Other than that, I thought you did a great job in making it believable that this sixteen-year-old could become the Lucius we all know from the books. Nothing was too off or unrealistic. I congratulate you on that.
My last comment is going to say just how much I LOVED the organ! It was a fabulous idea, and incredibly creepy; it really helped add to the overall mood and feeling of the story. Your portrayal of Tom/Voldemort (whichever one he needs to be refered to in this), was also wonderful. I congratulate you on an excellent story.
Signed,
Dark Princess
Everything you want in the world... for a song. What a fantastic concept, and how well you write it! It's amazing to watch Lucius change from something very like a Draco to the Lucius we now know. The traps that Voldemort lays.. they're brilliant. I could just see the web of deceit closing in on Lucius. And when we hear him say:
"Lord Voldemort had not taken Avery into his confidences. Lucius hid that knowledge jealously like a new-found prize."
We know then that the transformation is complete, that Voldemort has succeeded in what he set out to do. And yet in saying:
"The truth hit Lucius like a blow. Yet there was no judgment on Tom's face, nor even a trace of disappointment. ...Tom neither praised nor condemned him, the Malfoy heir who was not permitted to be average. ... Legs sprawled out like a child's, Lucius looked up at Riddle in gratitude, feeling strangely clean. "
you show us a part of Lucius that is somehow worthy of respect, scum though we know him to be from the books. His character as you've drawn it is fascinating; not even JKR's Lucius has made me want to know more about him (probably because he's not the main character, but still), and you have.
This is a magnificient story, the best I have read in a long while. I won't compare you to other fanfic writers, because I don't think that would be a compliment to you. You have a way with words that transcends the fandom level of writing. I am really looking forward to reading your other work.. and I'm recommending this story on my blog.
You capture a haunting, spooky imagry with this. Very interesting take on Malfoy; most stories I've read have him joining the Death Eaters because of the cause (ie-- eliminating non-purebloods). But this take on Malfoy's meeting -- and his requests/wishes -- is very believable. Using the organ and song as a test -- that was bloody brilliant, and chilling.
*Icarus rolls happily in Gen reviews.*
Chilling. A convincing rendition of a first meeting between master and new-found slave.
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Date: 2006-01-08 03:03 am (UTC)Also, I agree with the critique that Lucius would use "mother" instead of "mummy." Though I do like the childishness of mummy so I think I'll leave it. :)
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Date: 2006-01-08 03:37 am (UTC)O.O
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Date: 2006-01-08 04:37 am (UTC)Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-08 04:53 am (UTC)It says in their ToS that all claims and license terminates as soon as you discontinue using the service, so I imagine you'd be free to do whatever with the fics after they've been taken off the site. Still, no point in risking it, or wasting time posting someplace with suspicious terms. The Sugar Quill sounds like a much better place to post things and the fic they host tends to be of a higher caliber too, since they have the application process for new authors and Unknowable Room does not.