Since my Muse... (Icarus glances over at foul-tempered chained creature in fairy wings)... has been lazy and uncooperative lately, giving me only partial stories... (Muse bares its fangs gleefully)... with incomplete arcs and no direction... (Muse makes a cawing sound that's suspiciously like laughter)
... there will be some odd things in this journal. I openly admit that the story below is difficult to describe. It has the flavour of a vignette, one that's oddly incomplete, yet is 2,700 words long. But I had to rip these pages out to use the rest of the notebook for school, so if I didn't develop this half page of notes it would have been gone, I tell you, gone!
(Muse grooms itself, ignoring Icarus)
I refused to be cowed. I will develop what little I have. And I will write, yes, write!
Title: Colony Atlantis
Fandom: SGA, but with SG-1 sliding in there.
Summary: This is what happens when Weir begins to build her vision of a utopia.
Coloney Atlantis
By Icarus
Once the Wraith were beaten back, Atlantis was open for colonization. That is, for people who had the clearance to even know about the Stargate. Which, fortunately or unfortunately, she wasn't sure, severely limited the possible colonists.
Dr. Elizabeth Weir looked up from her first draft of the Atlantis Constitution. Stained glass windows poured colored light into her office.
The various Earth governments had seen fit to make her the governor of this colony. They, apparently, viewed her as someone who not only had done well in the face of the Wraith threat, but as one who was impartial enough to represent the interests of Earth and Atlantis, instead of just the United States. It was quite a compliment. She had the complete backing of the U.N. and Atlantis was called a territory of Earth.
Elizabeth stared down at the sheaf of papers in front of her. She understood now how the framers of the Constitution must have felt, that pull towards social engineering, hoping to create a utopia through her words alone. She knew it was impossible, that in reality she was only creating her own idea of utopia. But it was the only frame of reference she had, and so far, her sense of what was right and just had served her well. With one stroke of the pen she hoped to do away with many injustices she'd seen on Earth and other worlds.
Elizabeth smiled. She also had to think of the present, and build in reasons for people from the SGC to come here to live, rather than just do research and return. Luckily, sometimes those two aims intersected. Alongside provisions that would make any scientist weep with joy, she happily obliterated the legal basis in Atlantis for Don't Ask, Don't Tell.
~*~*~
In retrospect, she should have been less surprised that among the first wave of applications for Atlantean residency, under "J," was the highly qualified Dr. Daniel Jackson, Ph. D. She signed and stamped that one right away, before he escaped or General O'Neill found out. She braced herself for a fight with the SGC even as she inwardly crowed over their coup. This was exactly the sort of thing she was hoping for.
Then she got to "O," for "O'Neill, Brig. General J.," and stopped.
The name on the form was "Jonathan" but the alternate name was listed as "Jack." There were a lot of skipped questions and parts were illegible. Still, it didn't matter; she'd recognize that scrawl anywhere. She had the General's Bon Voyage note framed in her office.
Wondering what this meant, she signed it, and radioed Sheppard. "John." She heard him grunt in response, obviously busy. "I'd like you to give the grand tour for the next batch of immigrants."
"Can't someone else do that? I really don't have time to mess with a bunch of guests." He said the word like it meant "cockroaches."
"Oh, I think you'll want to do this one," she smiled, and debated whether she should warn him or let him be as shocked as she'd been.
~*~*~
The Stargate whooshed to life. John Sheppard hovered on the edge of the platform, nervously shifting between standing at ease to swinging his arms, looking for all the world like an eager schoolboy.
The General staggered through, a simple Air Force dufflebag slung over his shoulder. His white head glanced back at the wormhole almost accusingly.
"It didn't feel any different," he said in a tone of amazement.
Dr. Jackson emerged beside him, carrying way too much stuff. Four or five straps criss-crossed his shoulders in addition to the laptop and a suitcase in his hand.
"It was a whole galaxy. Shouldn't it have felt different?"
"Huh?" Dr. Jackson said. He dropped his bags almost immediately to tie his shoe. "You went to the galaxy of Aida when we met the Asgard." He glanced up at the general and squinted. "You tell me."
"I don't remember," the General admitted.
He waved to John then, seeming way more relaxed than John had ever seen him. Of course, the fact that he was in BDUs instead of a full dress uniform inspecting a base probably helped. "Hey! You must be the welcoming committee. Sheppard, right?"
"I am, sir," John grinned, rocking back on his heels. Until he remembered his manners. "Can I help you with your bag?"
"Nah." He gave John that familiar tight smile as he hoisted the dufflebag a little higher. "But I think we need a full train of pack mules for Daniel here."
"I got it, I got it…." Dr. Jackson waved him off as he stood. "Oh hey. There's no klaxon. That's what's different."
"Yeah, I noticed that." The General frowned around at the gateroom. "Isn't it kinda dark around here?"
"Well, it's still early Atlantis time. We dim them at night to—" John began.
All the lights abruptly brightened. Startled technicians sat up in their chairs, checking to see what had gone wrong.
"Ah," the General blinked. "That's better. Thanks."
John stared at him in confusion. He hadn't done anything.
"So." The General clapped his hands together. "I hear you've got an ocean. Where's the beach?"
~*~*~
John had never met anyone who had the ATA gene as strong as his own. Watching the General walk through Atlantis waking things up that usually only responded to him… well, it was a little like having your dog suddenly happily play with a stranger. On the one hand it was nice; but on the other hand, you felt like Hey…. That's my dog.
Sheppard shouldn't have been surprised. He knew the General had defended Earth from the chair in Antarctica. But somehow, it just seemed a little unfair.
Though it was funny to see the General jump back from ordinary things. "Whoa!"
"It's all right," John reassured him. "It's, ah, just a fountain."
"Yeah," the General said slowly, edging away from the wall that was now running trails of water all the way down the hallway. "Do they have to have the sprinkler system come on when you just walk by it?"
"It's a little spooky until you get used to it." John smiled.
"Why didn't it do that to Daniel?" The General looked at the walls suspiciously. Sure enough, the fountain shut down as Daniel passed.
"Well now, that's discouraging," Dr. Jackson commented.
"I expect he doesn't have the gene."
"Actually I don't, but sometimes this stuff works for me anyway." He gazed up at the fountain. "We think it's a side effect of having been Ascended." John's eyebrows shot up. "And… Descended again, which is probably why these don't recognize me." He frowned, clearly disappointed. Then he seemed to finally notice John's expression. "It's a long story."
"I bet."
"They kicked him out of heaven. Twice," the General grinned.
"Very funny, Jack."
"He's a very bad boy," the General continued.
"Cut it out, Jack."
~*~*~
"Last stop," John announced, opening the door to the General's spacious one-bedroom suite.
It had a larger than average living room, a little kitchen and extra den. Plus, there was a balcony off the bedroom with a perfect view of the ocean. John considered it a good choice. Boxes of the General's stuff were already lined up against one wall. The General started picking things up and putting them down at random. A wall panel lit at his touch. He blinked and it shut off again.
"One of the best rooms in the house," John said, "if you don't mind a bit of a walk to the transporters."
Dr. Jackson dumped his bags with a tired sigh, and sagged against the door.
General O'Neill watched interestedly, his eyes alight, as John revealed and explained the holographic climate control panels. He didn't seem nervous about this part. Of course, they'd remind any pilot of a heads-up display.
"Huh," he said. "Can you play video games with these?"
"Well no, though—" At that moment another, bluer, hologram dropped down from the ceiling and the lights dimmed. The numbers were in Ancient, but the targets were fairly clear. John forgot his earlier jealousy because, hey, video game! "Cool!"
"I've got the blue… things…" the General said, pulling up a box. John pulled up another one.
Dr. Jackson looked between them helplessly. "I'll be, uh… never mind." He popped open the bathroom door and disappeared.
As John proceeded to totally kick the general's ass, O'Neill leaned over and asked, "Can we get beer out of this thing?"
"I tried that." John pursed his lips, turning his head as he took out two more of the general's blue blobs. "It didn't work."
The General nodded sagely. "Alas. It's never a perfect world."
~*~*~
By the time John had completely slaughtered the general at this new game, he'd worked up the nerve to ask the sixty-four thousand dollar question. Dr. Jackson was opening boxes and unpacking dishes carefully wrapped in newspaper. John stared at the newsprint, evidence of a faraway world.
"So. What brings you to Atlantis?"
John said it lightly, but the entire original expedition team was puzzled and had a million theories, ranging from General O'Neill taking over the base command (Rodney's very disturbing theory), to his looking for a place to retire and surf (Carson's thought, though it was a little hard to imagine the general surfing).
"I confess no one was surprised that Dr. Jackson wanted to come, but there's been a little curiosity about what you're, ah, looking to do in the Pegasus galaxy."
"Oh. I dunno…" General O'Neill said, letting out a breath as he leaned his elbows on his knees. "I thought I'd just… have a look around. See what's out here."
The General's head jerked up, his attention caught by something across the room. "You said there are windows in the bedroom?" He didn't wait for an answer but made a beeline for them.
John stared after him, bemused, and wondered if the General himself knew what he was doing here. He stuffed his hands in his pockets and said to the air, "He's seriously gonna get in my hair, isn't he?"
Dr. Jackson wrinkled his nose and nodded, "Yeah. I'd count on it."
John reached for one of Dr. Jackson's bags. "Can I help you find your quarters? They've gotta be on the chart somewhere."
Dr. Jackson squinted at him with a too-piercing look. "Um." He licked his lips. "These are my quarters, actually." He didn't take his steady eyes off John's face.
John knew it was rude, but nothing could scrape his jaw off the floor. It just kept hanging open. "A General?!"
O'Neill returned, wind-blown and enthusiastic. "Daniel, there's a helluva view out there!"
His eyes shifted quickly from Daniel to John and back again. His shoulders drooped. "You told him."
"What am I supposed to be, a secret?" Dr. Jackson said a little testily.
O'Neill ran a hand over his face with a frustrated gesture. "It's no one's business."
"Um," and John was proud of the fact he had finally managed to close his mouth, "I've gotta tell you that if this is supposed to be private…" John was at a loss for words. "Atlantis is a big place, but it is an island."
"It's all right," O'Neill waved off his warning, though he looked very far from all right. He rubbed his eyes. "I've been in the military a long time, Sheppard. It'll be all over the place in a day."
"Try an hour." John arched his eyebrows. "This is Atlantis, sir. It's like a small town. Only smaller."
~*~*~
General O'Neill and Dr. Jackson successfully made their way to the mess hall, something that John made everyone do on their own, sort of as a little test. If they didn't show up for lunch, he knew they needed a refresher on the transporter system.
They looked… quaint, actually, staring around like tourists as they slowly found the trays and joined the chow line. The General actually sniffed one of the desserts and John heard a distant "what the hell is that?" as Dr. Jackson rolled his eyes in patient embarrassment. Jackson hovered protectively over General O'Neill and John wondered briefly who was top and who was bottom.
He abruptly wiped that thought from his mind. He so didn't want to go there. It was weird being military in Atlantis after Weir instituted her policy. There was a surprisingly high percentage of gay Marines versus the other branches. John would have expected more Navy guys to tell the truth.
The General spotted John and steered towards his table.
Apparently the argument had continued all the way. "Jack, it's another planet. Didn't you think they'd have different food?"
"No…" General O'Neill said petulantly. Though John noticed he'd picked the dessert in question, which was a good sign. Some people left because of the food.
"So how's it going your first day?" John asked, waving to Rodney, whose tray was already overloaded.
"Strange," O'Neill replied with blunt honesty. "Very strange. Glowing steps. Weird… food," he seemed reluctant to use the term. He leaned over the table. "And everyone keeps looking at us."
Dr. Jackson sighed elaborately. "They're not looking at us for any particular reason, Jack, except maybe that we're new. That kind of paranoia just a normal psychological reaction to—"
"Ooo, gay General! Who knew?"
Rodney plunked his tray next to General O'Neill's and was already eating as he sat.
"I bet the Air Force is really pissed at you."
John stared at him, open-mouthed. At the General's glare he spread his hands and mouthed earnestly: I didn't--!
Dr. Jackson finished his sentence. "—of course, I could be wrong."
Rodney stopped chewing for a moment, catching John's impatient look. "Oh, it's okay, Colonel. The General and I go way back to the good ol' days at the SGC, eh?" He grinned.
"McKay," General O'Neill growled. And he did seem to know Rodney. "You know, I forgot you were here." He said it like this would be a good reason to go back to Earth.
Then it hit John. If people knew about the General and Dr. Jackson, they couldn't go back. He was floored by the gamble the two had taken. Suddenly it didn't seem so far-fetched that the crotchety old General and this over-eager academic had been two of the first through the Stargate.
They were insane.
"Does this mean that Colonel Carter is available?" Rodney was saying. "Because I always got the sense that she had the hots for, ah, you know…." He gestured meaningfully with his spoon at the general.
"She's married. And not to you." The general took a bite of his dessert.
"Ah, well, I'll just wait for the inevitable divorce then." Rodney leaned on the table and stared off wistfully into the distance. "I'll bet she's a hellcat."
Weir found their table and was positively beaming.
"Hello, and welcome to Atlantis!" She settled her tray next to John's. "I heard about you two. That's wonderful news, exactly what I wanted for Atlantis: freedoms not found anywhere else," she breathed.
Uh-oh, John thought. Here we go….
"The Althosians don't make any distinction in their wedding customs. It's a beautiful ceremony. I've already officiated at several."
Her smile broadened. John had been learning over the last month how she loved to 'stick it to the man' with dramatic public gestures.
Dr. Jackson cringed and said, "We, uh, were planning to be a little more… low-key."
"A lot more low-key." The General glowered at all of them.
Dr. Beckett found their table. "I heard the good news. I think it's lovely," he said with soft eyes and that soft Scottish burr. "Much better than surfing."
Dr. Jackson gave him a funny look. John quickly explained, "We, uh, had a bet on why the general here was coming to Atlantis."
"Oh."
"Who won?" the general asked them.
Zelenka slipped into the seat beside Dr. Jackson and briefly introduced himself. "Dr. Jackson, we are so glad you have come." He shook Dr. Jackson's hand. "We have number of translations that are beyond hopeless." He turned to the General. "And you have this ATA gene, yes?"
Rodney looked up from his plate. "No he doesn't—-oh. Wait. He does!" His eyes widened and glazed over with the possibilities.
Zelenka nodded briskly, stabbing into his vegetables. Someone had done his homework. "Before you are become too busy we have many, many needs for you. After lunch, my lab, yes? Rodney will show you where."
"I don't have time to play Tour Guide," Rodney complained with a sarcastic roll of his eyes.
"You eat and you talk. It is inefficient. I will finish before you."
"Yes but—"
"You are going there anyway!"
Rodney caved, tipping his head. "True."
"Now see," General O'Neill pointed to Zelenka, "this guy I like."
"Trust me, General," Weir smiled. "We can keep you very busy in Atlantis." She included Dr. Jackson in her gaze. "Both of you."
... there will be some odd things in this journal. I openly admit that the story below is difficult to describe. It has the flavour of a vignette, one that's oddly incomplete, yet is 2,700 words long. But I had to rip these pages out to use the rest of the notebook for school, so if I didn't develop this half page of notes it would have been gone, I tell you, gone!
(Muse grooms itself, ignoring Icarus)
I refused to be cowed. I will develop what little I have. And I will write, yes, write!
Title: Colony Atlantis
Fandom: SGA, but with SG-1 sliding in there.
Summary: This is what happens when Weir begins to build her vision of a utopia.
Coloney Atlantis
By Icarus
Once the Wraith were beaten back, Atlantis was open for colonization. That is, for people who had the clearance to even know about the Stargate. Which, fortunately or unfortunately, she wasn't sure, severely limited the possible colonists.
Dr. Elizabeth Weir looked up from her first draft of the Atlantis Constitution. Stained glass windows poured colored light into her office.
The various Earth governments had seen fit to make her the governor of this colony. They, apparently, viewed her as someone who not only had done well in the face of the Wraith threat, but as one who was impartial enough to represent the interests of Earth and Atlantis, instead of just the United States. It was quite a compliment. She had the complete backing of the U.N. and Atlantis was called a territory of Earth.
Elizabeth stared down at the sheaf of papers in front of her. She understood now how the framers of the Constitution must have felt, that pull towards social engineering, hoping to create a utopia through her words alone. She knew it was impossible, that in reality she was only creating her own idea of utopia. But it was the only frame of reference she had, and so far, her sense of what was right and just had served her well. With one stroke of the pen she hoped to do away with many injustices she'd seen on Earth and other worlds.
Elizabeth smiled. She also had to think of the present, and build in reasons for people from the SGC to come here to live, rather than just do research and return. Luckily, sometimes those two aims intersected. Alongside provisions that would make any scientist weep with joy, she happily obliterated the legal basis in Atlantis for Don't Ask, Don't Tell.
~*~*~
In retrospect, she should have been less surprised that among the first wave of applications for Atlantean residency, under "J," was the highly qualified Dr. Daniel Jackson, Ph. D. She signed and stamped that one right away, before he escaped or General O'Neill found out. She braced herself for a fight with the SGC even as she inwardly crowed over their coup. This was exactly the sort of thing she was hoping for.
Then she got to "O," for "O'Neill, Brig. General J.," and stopped.
The name on the form was "Jonathan" but the alternate name was listed as "Jack." There were a lot of skipped questions and parts were illegible. Still, it didn't matter; she'd recognize that scrawl anywhere. She had the General's Bon Voyage note framed in her office.
Wondering what this meant, she signed it, and radioed Sheppard. "John." She heard him grunt in response, obviously busy. "I'd like you to give the grand tour for the next batch of immigrants."
"Can't someone else do that? I really don't have time to mess with a bunch of guests." He said the word like it meant "cockroaches."
"Oh, I think you'll want to do this one," she smiled, and debated whether she should warn him or let him be as shocked as she'd been.
~*~*~
The Stargate whooshed to life. John Sheppard hovered on the edge of the platform, nervously shifting between standing at ease to swinging his arms, looking for all the world like an eager schoolboy.
The General staggered through, a simple Air Force dufflebag slung over his shoulder. His white head glanced back at the wormhole almost accusingly.
"It didn't feel any different," he said in a tone of amazement.
Dr. Jackson emerged beside him, carrying way too much stuff. Four or five straps criss-crossed his shoulders in addition to the laptop and a suitcase in his hand.
"It was a whole galaxy. Shouldn't it have felt different?"
"Huh?" Dr. Jackson said. He dropped his bags almost immediately to tie his shoe. "You went to the galaxy of Aida when we met the Asgard." He glanced up at the general and squinted. "You tell me."
"I don't remember," the General admitted.
He waved to John then, seeming way more relaxed than John had ever seen him. Of course, the fact that he was in BDUs instead of a full dress uniform inspecting a base probably helped. "Hey! You must be the welcoming committee. Sheppard, right?"
"I am, sir," John grinned, rocking back on his heels. Until he remembered his manners. "Can I help you with your bag?"
"Nah." He gave John that familiar tight smile as he hoisted the dufflebag a little higher. "But I think we need a full train of pack mules for Daniel here."
"I got it, I got it…." Dr. Jackson waved him off as he stood. "Oh hey. There's no klaxon. That's what's different."
"Yeah, I noticed that." The General frowned around at the gateroom. "Isn't it kinda dark around here?"
"Well, it's still early Atlantis time. We dim them at night to—" John began.
All the lights abruptly brightened. Startled technicians sat up in their chairs, checking to see what had gone wrong.
"Ah," the General blinked. "That's better. Thanks."
John stared at him in confusion. He hadn't done anything.
"So." The General clapped his hands together. "I hear you've got an ocean. Where's the beach?"
~*~*~
John had never met anyone who had the ATA gene as strong as his own. Watching the General walk through Atlantis waking things up that usually only responded to him… well, it was a little like having your dog suddenly happily play with a stranger. On the one hand it was nice; but on the other hand, you felt like Hey…. That's my dog.
Sheppard shouldn't have been surprised. He knew the General had defended Earth from the chair in Antarctica. But somehow, it just seemed a little unfair.
Though it was funny to see the General jump back from ordinary things. "Whoa!"
"It's all right," John reassured him. "It's, ah, just a fountain."
"Yeah," the General said slowly, edging away from the wall that was now running trails of water all the way down the hallway. "Do they have to have the sprinkler system come on when you just walk by it?"
"It's a little spooky until you get used to it." John smiled.
"Why didn't it do that to Daniel?" The General looked at the walls suspiciously. Sure enough, the fountain shut down as Daniel passed.
"Well now, that's discouraging," Dr. Jackson commented.
"I expect he doesn't have the gene."
"Actually I don't, but sometimes this stuff works for me anyway." He gazed up at the fountain. "We think it's a side effect of having been Ascended." John's eyebrows shot up. "And… Descended again, which is probably why these don't recognize me." He frowned, clearly disappointed. Then he seemed to finally notice John's expression. "It's a long story."
"I bet."
"They kicked him out of heaven. Twice," the General grinned.
"Very funny, Jack."
"He's a very bad boy," the General continued.
"Cut it out, Jack."
~*~*~
"Last stop," John announced, opening the door to the General's spacious one-bedroom suite.
It had a larger than average living room, a little kitchen and extra den. Plus, there was a balcony off the bedroom with a perfect view of the ocean. John considered it a good choice. Boxes of the General's stuff were already lined up against one wall. The General started picking things up and putting them down at random. A wall panel lit at his touch. He blinked and it shut off again.
"One of the best rooms in the house," John said, "if you don't mind a bit of a walk to the transporters."
Dr. Jackson dumped his bags with a tired sigh, and sagged against the door.
General O'Neill watched interestedly, his eyes alight, as John revealed and explained the holographic climate control panels. He didn't seem nervous about this part. Of course, they'd remind any pilot of a heads-up display.
"Huh," he said. "Can you play video games with these?"
"Well no, though—" At that moment another, bluer, hologram dropped down from the ceiling and the lights dimmed. The numbers were in Ancient, but the targets were fairly clear. John forgot his earlier jealousy because, hey, video game! "Cool!"
"I've got the blue… things…" the General said, pulling up a box. John pulled up another one.
Dr. Jackson looked between them helplessly. "I'll be, uh… never mind." He popped open the bathroom door and disappeared.
As John proceeded to totally kick the general's ass, O'Neill leaned over and asked, "Can we get beer out of this thing?"
"I tried that." John pursed his lips, turning his head as he took out two more of the general's blue blobs. "It didn't work."
The General nodded sagely. "Alas. It's never a perfect world."
~*~*~
By the time John had completely slaughtered the general at this new game, he'd worked up the nerve to ask the sixty-four thousand dollar question. Dr. Jackson was opening boxes and unpacking dishes carefully wrapped in newspaper. John stared at the newsprint, evidence of a faraway world.
"So. What brings you to Atlantis?"
John said it lightly, but the entire original expedition team was puzzled and had a million theories, ranging from General O'Neill taking over the base command (Rodney's very disturbing theory), to his looking for a place to retire and surf (Carson's thought, though it was a little hard to imagine the general surfing).
"I confess no one was surprised that Dr. Jackson wanted to come, but there's been a little curiosity about what you're, ah, looking to do in the Pegasus galaxy."
"Oh. I dunno…" General O'Neill said, letting out a breath as he leaned his elbows on his knees. "I thought I'd just… have a look around. See what's out here."
The General's head jerked up, his attention caught by something across the room. "You said there are windows in the bedroom?" He didn't wait for an answer but made a beeline for them.
John stared after him, bemused, and wondered if the General himself knew what he was doing here. He stuffed his hands in his pockets and said to the air, "He's seriously gonna get in my hair, isn't he?"
Dr. Jackson wrinkled his nose and nodded, "Yeah. I'd count on it."
John reached for one of Dr. Jackson's bags. "Can I help you find your quarters? They've gotta be on the chart somewhere."
Dr. Jackson squinted at him with a too-piercing look. "Um." He licked his lips. "These are my quarters, actually." He didn't take his steady eyes off John's face.
John knew it was rude, but nothing could scrape his jaw off the floor. It just kept hanging open. "A General?!"
O'Neill returned, wind-blown and enthusiastic. "Daniel, there's a helluva view out there!"
His eyes shifted quickly from Daniel to John and back again. His shoulders drooped. "You told him."
"What am I supposed to be, a secret?" Dr. Jackson said a little testily.
O'Neill ran a hand over his face with a frustrated gesture. "It's no one's business."
"Um," and John was proud of the fact he had finally managed to close his mouth, "I've gotta tell you that if this is supposed to be private…" John was at a loss for words. "Atlantis is a big place, but it is an island."
"It's all right," O'Neill waved off his warning, though he looked very far from all right. He rubbed his eyes. "I've been in the military a long time, Sheppard. It'll be all over the place in a day."
"Try an hour." John arched his eyebrows. "This is Atlantis, sir. It's like a small town. Only smaller."
~*~*~
General O'Neill and Dr. Jackson successfully made their way to the mess hall, something that John made everyone do on their own, sort of as a little test. If they didn't show up for lunch, he knew they needed a refresher on the transporter system.
They looked… quaint, actually, staring around like tourists as they slowly found the trays and joined the chow line. The General actually sniffed one of the desserts and John heard a distant "what the hell is that?" as Dr. Jackson rolled his eyes in patient embarrassment. Jackson hovered protectively over General O'Neill and John wondered briefly who was top and who was bottom.
He abruptly wiped that thought from his mind. He so didn't want to go there. It was weird being military in Atlantis after Weir instituted her policy. There was a surprisingly high percentage of gay Marines versus the other branches. John would have expected more Navy guys to tell the truth.
The General spotted John and steered towards his table.
Apparently the argument had continued all the way. "Jack, it's another planet. Didn't you think they'd have different food?"
"No…" General O'Neill said petulantly. Though John noticed he'd picked the dessert in question, which was a good sign. Some people left because of the food.
"So how's it going your first day?" John asked, waving to Rodney, whose tray was already overloaded.
"Strange," O'Neill replied with blunt honesty. "Very strange. Glowing steps. Weird… food," he seemed reluctant to use the term. He leaned over the table. "And everyone keeps looking at us."
Dr. Jackson sighed elaborately. "They're not looking at us for any particular reason, Jack, except maybe that we're new. That kind of paranoia just a normal psychological reaction to—"
"Ooo, gay General! Who knew?"
Rodney plunked his tray next to General O'Neill's and was already eating as he sat.
"I bet the Air Force is really pissed at you."
John stared at him, open-mouthed. At the General's glare he spread his hands and mouthed earnestly: I didn't--!
Dr. Jackson finished his sentence. "—of course, I could be wrong."
Rodney stopped chewing for a moment, catching John's impatient look. "Oh, it's okay, Colonel. The General and I go way back to the good ol' days at the SGC, eh?" He grinned.
"McKay," General O'Neill growled. And he did seem to know Rodney. "You know, I forgot you were here." He said it like this would be a good reason to go back to Earth.
Then it hit John. If people knew about the General and Dr. Jackson, they couldn't go back. He was floored by the gamble the two had taken. Suddenly it didn't seem so far-fetched that the crotchety old General and this over-eager academic had been two of the first through the Stargate.
They were insane.
"Does this mean that Colonel Carter is available?" Rodney was saying. "Because I always got the sense that she had the hots for, ah, you know…." He gestured meaningfully with his spoon at the general.
"She's married. And not to you." The general took a bite of his dessert.
"Ah, well, I'll just wait for the inevitable divorce then." Rodney leaned on the table and stared off wistfully into the distance. "I'll bet she's a hellcat."
Weir found their table and was positively beaming.
"Hello, and welcome to Atlantis!" She settled her tray next to John's. "I heard about you two. That's wonderful news, exactly what I wanted for Atlantis: freedoms not found anywhere else," she breathed.
Uh-oh, John thought. Here we go….
"The Althosians don't make any distinction in their wedding customs. It's a beautiful ceremony. I've already officiated at several."
Her smile broadened. John had been learning over the last month how she loved to 'stick it to the man' with dramatic public gestures.
Dr. Jackson cringed and said, "We, uh, were planning to be a little more… low-key."
"A lot more low-key." The General glowered at all of them.
Dr. Beckett found their table. "I heard the good news. I think it's lovely," he said with soft eyes and that soft Scottish burr. "Much better than surfing."
Dr. Jackson gave him a funny look. John quickly explained, "We, uh, had a bet on why the general here was coming to Atlantis."
"Oh."
"Who won?" the general asked them.
Zelenka slipped into the seat beside Dr. Jackson and briefly introduced himself. "Dr. Jackson, we are so glad you have come." He shook Dr. Jackson's hand. "We have number of translations that are beyond hopeless." He turned to the General. "And you have this ATA gene, yes?"
Rodney looked up from his plate. "No he doesn't—-oh. Wait. He does!" His eyes widened and glazed over with the possibilities.
Zelenka nodded briskly, stabbing into his vegetables. Someone had done his homework. "Before you are become too busy we have many, many needs for you. After lunch, my lab, yes? Rodney will show you where."
"I don't have time to play Tour Guide," Rodney complained with a sarcastic roll of his eyes.
"You eat and you talk. It is inefficient. I will finish before you."
"Yes but—"
"You are going there anyway!"
Rodney caved, tipping his head. "True."
"Now see," General O'Neill pointed to Zelenka, "this guy I like."
"Trust me, General," Weir smiled. "We can keep you very busy in Atlantis." She included Dr. Jackson in her gaze. "Both of you."
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Date: 2006-01-18 12:14 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-18 06:33 am (UTC)Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-18 12:31 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-18 06:34 am (UTC)Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-18 01:02 am (UTC)This was great. I love your brain right now.
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Date: 2006-01-18 06:35 am (UTC)Currently it is a very strange place.
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-18 01:28 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-19 03:51 am (UTC)Hee. He couldn't help it.
I think he understands McKay a little bit better now. Although Jack will never be comfortable with all this Atlantis... stuff. The technology will continue to somewhat freak him out.
There have been some noises about continuing this. And I started to. But then... I did something very, very bad.
I cut it apart. Dismembered it.
And made ruthless, ruthless changes. What I turned it into last night... I have no idea if I just screwed it up or not. There are parts that I'm aching that I've cut.
But that's okay. I still have this posted. I'll post the ripped-to-shreds version later tonight. *experiments in public with lightning flashing about*
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-18 01:38 am (UTC)And John with the "hey, that's my dog!" thing. Priceless!
I love stories where Jack comes to Atlantis and gets to play with the city, too.
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Date: 2006-01-19 03:33 am (UTC)Is it indecent to edit in public?
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-19 04:15 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-18 02:36 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-19 03:36 am (UTC)This is a very happy fusion, even if more of a slice of life or incomplete vignette. I'm working on a complete rewrite that turns this into a story, you know, with actual plot. The feel is completely different and I've had to lose some of my favourite parts.
Well. The writing teacher always did say "Make Drastic Changes!" But I usually do that in the outline process, not the writing process.
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-18 02:47 am (UTC)Good intro to the fic as well :) That's what really got me reading.
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Date: 2006-01-19 03:37 am (UTC)Jack is really in the earlier SG-1 shows. Do you get the Sci-Fi channel? (Asked because I don't.)
Now I have a completely different version of the same story (an attempt to turn it into a cohesive narrative) that I'll probably be posting sometime tonight. Deals more with the Jack/Daniel part of the story.
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-18 03:14 am (UTC)This is my idea of Stargate HEAVEN.
On the one hand it was nice; but on the other hand, you felt like Hey... That's my dog.
*pets John* yes baby, we know, Atlantis loves you.
(I can totally see John acting completely jealous, and Jack believing it's over Daniel, and Daniel and John bonding over something or other, and Jack getting totally jealous, and things escalating until they have a shouting match about 'You're stealing her/him and she/he is mine!!')
Love it. Totally, absolutely love it. Love it so much I'll do something I promise I'd never do cause it's rude and embarrassing but...
Pleeeeeaseee write more? please? pretty please with naked Rodney on top?
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Date: 2006-01-19 03:41 am (UTC)I'm not sure you'll like what I've done. *coughs* I've, uh, re-written. So this means I'll be *gasp, awe* editing in public.
The new version's a totally different version and I don't think... the only improvement is that it has story tension.
I don't usually do this. Usually I get a story idea and I stick with it. But this time... I'm making really radical changes, just to see what will happen. That's a step I normally save for the outline.
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-19 05:31 am (UTC)And bounce cause, fangirl...
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Date: 2006-01-18 04:49 am (UTC)I love the whole video game thing, too. Just like Jack to ask, and just like John to drop everything and jump in with both feet. This was a lot of fun.
But you know, I can definitely see what you mean, it doesn't feel like a completed fic. It feels like a prelude, or interlude of some sort. It does feel like a vignette. But definitely an enjoyable one.
I love that you keep your muse chained up...I need to figure out how to do that. Mine just takes off completely, and it's hell to woo it back into the house...
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Date: 2006-01-19 03:45 am (UTC)Yes, but the human sacrifices required to keep it fed get to be tiresome....
This was -- I knew I didn't want to lose this, it was just too much fun. But, yeah, it's not really a story.
I did something last night. Something that I'm not sure will work, but as an experiment is probably a good idea:
I made radical changes.
I mean, big, big changes. The tone is different, the narrative structure's totally different, it's moved from light-hearted to angst. And I've had to brutally cut some of my favorite moments.
I mean different.
My creative writing teacher always said to make radical changes. I'll be darned. I may have done it.
Now. I wouldn't say it's an improvement....
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-19 01:33 pm (UTC)You're a brave woman. I've done something similar, but usually under my beta's guidance/suggestion, so it's not quite the same thing, because I had someone else's backing before I headed into the whole thing. My beta is incredible. I'll come up with a half-assed idea, and she says: "Interesting, but what if..." and before I know it, I've totally re-written it, and it's so much better than what I had in the first place.
I love my beta. That's why her name goes right after mine - I'm twice the writer I'd be without her brilliant insight and direction. There are sometimes I even think she deserves co-writing credit, but she won't take it. She says it's her job to nudge me in the right direction.
So to make radical changes without support like that, is a huge deal. Good for you. Because it's good as it is, so what you're doing is taking a big chance, but those are the finest kind. I can't wait to read it again tonight.
The cutting part is really hard. Every time I get an email with "You're gonna hate me, but..." in the subject matter, I cringe, because it means something I really like is about to end up on the editing room floor. Sigh. I have to admit, I've kept some of them, and recycled them in other fic. Is that an option for you? Is there enough of them to save?
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Date: 2006-01-19 06:48 pm (UTC)Though I admit, it's easier for me to do this without the advice of a beta. Pride, I guess. *sheepish*
I haven't done anything like this since 2002, when I decided to obey my beta's hints (I'm a difficult, stubborn person to beta for) and try to fix the pacing problem I had in all my 2001 Lord of the Rings stories. I went from a lyrical Tolkien copycat to something very sparse.
I managed to rearrange the paragraphs a bit so I didn't lose the part about John's being jealous. That was the change that was gonna hurt. I... originally I was going to cut the scene in the mess hall, but I've left it, even though probably I should cut it.
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-19 03:32 am (UTC)I can never get enough of "bring Jack and Daniel" to Atlantis stories, and this was just perfect from top to bottom. (... As it were.) Seriously, I laughed out loud. I hooted. I could just *SEE* Rodney, in my mind, regressing to that particularly smug and energetic sort of snark that I remember from his debut on SG-1 (it's not that he's less snarky now, but there's an edge he had...). Voices: perfect. Reactions: perfect. Everyone: adorable.
So what does it take to convince you that a series of vignettes is no bad thing? :)
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Date: 2006-01-19 03:47 am (UTC)So what does it take to convince you that a series of vignettes is no bad thing? :)
I was thinking of that, and that's actually how I ended up writing The Walls Of Jericho. But I did, erm, an experiment instead. I'll be posting the carnage latter tonight.
Icarus
(http://www.icarus.slashcity.net/stories/wallsofjericho.html)
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Date: 2006-01-27 03:20 pm (UTC)(I recall being puzzled by only one thing in it. :) The bit at the very end where Jack and Daniel are driving, and there's a line about "they passed the last exit to Boulder and Daniel's apartment", and I remember thinking, WHAT? How could Daniel's apt. possibly be in *Boulder*?)
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Date: 2006-01-27 10:02 pm (UTC)I did have a beta go through it before I published the whole story. I was sure that it would wander and ramble as a result of the way I wrote it. But apparently the structure was fairly solid. Actually -- heh -- it echoes the way SG-1 episodes have breaks for commercials. ;)
Why wouldn't Daniel's apartment be in Boulder? A lot of people commute from Boulder....
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-27 10:24 pm (UTC)Why wouldn't Daniel's apartment be in Boulder? A lot of people commute from Boulder....
People commute from Boulder to Colorado Springs? When it's 85+ miles and the main highway between the two has to pass through the entire downtown area of Denver? Cheyenne Mountain is, after all, slightly south of the Springs, whereas Boulder is on the opposite (north) side of Denver. I personally would find it easier to believe that Daniel had an apt. in Pueblo.
I mean, sure, I guess I believe that people could *do* commute from Boulder to NORAD. I just don't see why Daniel *would* -- when any emergency at the SGC that caught him at home and required him to hoof it there would involve a minimum of 1 hour driving-time (if he drives with a lead foot), and possibly more depending on traffic. That just seems inefficient and counter-productive to me. Not to mention -- when you've gotten home from an exhausting mission and you just want to get home, who wants an hour and a half drive? When -- and I can't really get past this -- it would be just as easy to get an apt. in the actual town of Colorado Springs? And cut down on his commute immensely?
To me, picking a place of residence with a long and possibly hairy commute is a trade-off decision. You would have to value something in Boulder really highly. But what is there in Boulder that Daniel would value that highly? I also don't see Daniel as being the type who'd rather waste time in his car that he could be devoting to the work he does.
It also just startled me because I think it was the very first time I had come across a fanfic that speculated any of the team living anywhere *but* Colorado Springs itself.
What was/is it about Boulder that made you so much want to put Daniel's apt. there?
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Date: 2006-01-28 07:12 pm (UTC)Boulder is an interesting place. It's home to every kind of New Age, Buddhist, and alternative religion known to man (along with a ton of outdoor shops) yet those groups are rather hard-partying, too. It's a young crowd, too, because of the college. So it seemed the sort of place Daniel would like, but I was thinking of the much shorter drive to Denver instead of the longer drive to Colorado Springs.
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-31 07:03 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-19 07:55 am (UTC)He thinks it's so cool you're into this stuff.
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-27 03:23 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2006-01-27 11:54 pm (UTC)I have yet to identity all the weapons used. The 2nd episode featuring that Super Soldier (where SG-1 re-gates into the BLOWN up camp after working on a new weapon, you know where Cpt. Carter is bleeding and running for her very life) Tealc' is seen carrying what I believe is a South African manufactured, drum-fed/rotary magazine 40-mm Grenade Launcher!
Usually SG-1's writers and military advisors do a superb job of protraying the weapons used for the right situations. I say 'usually'. But a 40MM high explosive Grenade Bomb round when it explodes it is lethal to anyone with a radius of about 30-yards give or take. And Tealc' would have been seriously injured or worse when he fires it at the Super Soldier at such close range as he was. The writers were out to lunch that day, they clearly fucked up.
The DOGS OF WAR is an excellent Mercenary movie and it shows Christopher Walken (one of favorite actors) using one of these versatile, awesome 40mm Grenade Launchers.
I found and then lost the website that described a South Korean made .12 gauge Automatic Shotgun as used by the Black soldier serving with Major Kowoski in Season 1, 2nd episode. The dude is firing one from the prone position atop the hill. This is a heavy bitch of a gun, but has 12-round drum magazine. The Janes Recognition Guide to Special Forces Weapons does not even list it, odd. But it's featured in at least two SG-1 episodes.
Anyway, I can fast-forward from Season 1 to 8 here and look for the various weapons.
Another poorly writen thing is the useage of shoulder-fired AT-4 Rocket Launchers at fast diving Gould Gliders = slim ass chance of hitting one with an un-guided projectile. Compared to Kowaski in Season 1, firing a STINGER heat-seeking, guided missile at a 'Glider.
Anyway, my personal rants. BTW, MP-5 submachine guns are worthless except for urban close-in fighting. Too many episodes in Seasons 1-2 carrying these into wide open terrain. Much better weapon would have been the M-4 carbine chopped barrel M-16A2 rifle with retractable butt-stock and hard-hitting long range 5.56mm Rifle bullet verses a whimpy 9mm Pistol bullet.
Ok, Icarus has emailed me so I'm back to my Tent Fabric's discussion on another forum.
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Date: 2006-01-31 07:12 pm (UTC)I think it would be very interesting to annotate the caps not only with an identification of the weapon and a description of what it does and how it does it -- but also with commentary on its "realism", its appropriateness to the way it is presented and used. I think it could be just as interesting to discuss why a particular weapon-choice is wrong or puzzling, as it is to discuss how the weapon-choice is actually accurate and appropriate.
(It may be harder to guess why the show chose to go with something inaccurate; I think there are often a number of possible reasons, not just "they didn't research well enough" or "they didn't know any better". But I find it especially puzzling when they use something appropriate once -- such as the Stinger SAM in COTG -- and thereafter use something inappropriate, like the AT4s. Why does that happen? There again, though, there could be production reasons that we can't guess at. Or... so why did they start off arming everyone with the HK MP5s? I guess that could almost spawn a whole different sort of website.)
For the truly anal writer (however small that audience may be), both types of information are useful. Because you can be committed as a writer to being true to the show, even when the show is inaccurate; or you can decide to be accurate in your writing even if canon isn't. (I guess different writers are comfortable with different approaches.) If you care to go into that much detail, anyway.
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Date: 2006-02-01 05:28 am (UTC)Which brings up another thing you and I need to address for both the authors and readers is the Loaded Weight of each of these weapons.
Jack in Season 6 Episode 9 Allegiance you can tell by the way he picks it up and then props it against the MALP that it's a HEAVY weapon to have to carry around. Designed to fire from the hip which Jack does in a believeable way. Loaded weight with 200-round magazine is 22-Lbs!
In Season 7, Episode 1, Fallen when the SG-# backup team comes, look off to the far right side of the field and you'll see the dumbest weapon yet, a guy suffering with a Barret M-82A1 'Light Fifty' a .50-caliber Anti-Material Sniper Rifle which weighs a stupendous 28-Lbs, 7-ounces NOT loaded!
"A .50 caliber ball bullet is by no means accurate enough for anti-personnel sniping at 1,000-yards range. The targets are such things as forward airstrips, radar sets, communication systems, fuel and ammunition dumps, and so forth."
"Equip a specialist team with one of these Rifles and some ammuntion, they would sneak into enemy territory --or be dropped or land there by helicopter--and with a few well-placed shots they could wreak several million dollars's worth of jet aircraft or radar or blow up a fuel dump.
Highly cost-effective for a a few rounds of of 50-caliber ammunition, even if they had abandon the Rifle. And with targets of that nature, the pinpoint accuracy of anti-personnel sniping is not quuite so critical."
Source - MILITARY SMALL ARMS Of The 20th Century page 387 Anti-Tank and Anti-Material Rifles 7th Edition Ian V. Hogg
So you see busting your balls carrying a fucking 30-plus pound (loaded weight with 10-shot magazine) .50-caliber Rifle is worthless, the barrel length as seen in that episode is longer, than Icarus is tall!
BTW, in Season 7, Episode 11 Evolution the ambush that SG-1 you're right, Jack is firing an M-60 bipod mounted, 7.62mm Light Machine Gun. Get hit with a 7.62mm bullet you are going down for sure!
The M-60 7.62mm Light Machine Gun (LMG) weighs 25-Lbs with NO ammuntion. Is belt-fed and is notorious for jamming in combat.
"The M-240 LMG rapidly acquired a formidable reputation for reliability, as a result which the US MArines demanded it as their sustained fire machinegun to replace the M-60."
In that same scene Carter is shown firing a weapon I don't know. It looks like a highly modified M-16M-4 with a Helical 75 or 100-round drum magazine and perforated barrel for faster cooling. It's basically a sawed-off poor man's Squad Automatic Weapon for about half the weight and fires the same 5.56mm bullet as does the M-249 SAW.
Tealc' is using the Para-Trooper version of the M-249 SAW. The difference is the telescoping metal buttstock and forward hand grip. Combat weight loaded is about 18-Lbs as compared to 22-Lbs for the standard M-249 SAW.
Lastly help me ID that drum magazine 40mm Grenade Laucher that Tealc' in Season 7, Episode 12 (part 2) is humping please! A 40mm High Explosive Grenade has a lethal radius (all around) of about 30-yards and Tealc's would have blown CARTER to bits when he fired this weapon at the super soldier attacking her. Who are these SG-1 Military Advisor's again?
Feel free to email directly at wilderness_guru@yahoo.com
Later,
WG
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Date: 2006-01-19 03:46 am (UTC)*pats you on back*
*encourages you to write more of this*
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Date: 2006-01-19 03:53 am (UTC)Well. There are two ways this can go. We can talk about what brought Jack and Daniel to Atlantis. Or we can talk about what happens to them there.
Option one (a complete shredding of this to pieces, omg I'm editing in public) I wrote last night. *adds finishing touches* Hmm. I'm not sure it worked.
I'll post it when I get home.
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-19 05:54 am (UTC)And I noticed in the comments that you're posting another version. Now I'm intrigued to see the differences, because the whole process of writing fascinates me. *g*
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Date: 2006-01-20 07:49 am (UTC)I'm enjoying sharing the process, getting people's feedback, being bold and brave... going where no scissors have gone before.
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-21 05:43 pm (UTC)And I liked John beating Jack at the game, and then realising how much of a pain in the ass a bored Jack is going to be... *evil laugh*
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Date: 2006-01-21 10:19 pm (UTC)*laughs* The other ideas I had about the direction of this story had to do with (possibly) finding a role for Jack in Atlantis. But that would have done two things: expanded the scope of the story to an epic ;), and also popped the bubble of SGA canon.
Here it's not violated and the two Stargate worlds interact seamlessly only because we haven't attempted to truly integrate them. Now Daniel can slide into SGA smoothly, but Jack is a General, outranking both Caldwell and Sheppard. He is a major disruption. Not being fond of drastic AUs I didn't want to go there.
Then, reviewing the story, it hit me that it was really about the reasons why Jack and Daniel left the SGC. So I followed the core idea backward. It's a story about exile really, even though everyone stays on good terms.
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-23 11:25 pm (UTC)*g*
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Date: 2006-01-20 05:48 am (UTC)Watching the General walk through Atlantis waking things up that usually only responded to him… well, it was a little like having your dog suddenly happily play with a stranger. On the one hand it was nice; but on the other hand, you felt like Hey…. That's my dog.
You really captured something with this bit, here. It's well-done.
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Date: 2006-01-20 07:55 am (UTC)Hey, Sheppard's so cute when he's jealous. Guess he can understand Rodney's feelings now, huh?
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-21 04:46 am (UTC)Also, I'm quite pleased you didn't put John and Rodney together as well - thanks for that, one OTP is enough. :)
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Date: 2006-01-21 04:52 am (UTC)Did you read the expanded version, with plot?
Colony Atlantis (http://icarusancalion.livejournal.com/450289.html#cutid1).
Warning: it's very, very different.
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-21 04:56 am (UTC)Actually, I was in favour of option two - what happens in Atlantis after they arrive. But then I've never actually gone for this pairing. :)
*goes to read*
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Date: 2006-01-21 05:41 am (UTC)And, I prefer the Goa'uld over the Wraith: better fashion sense, and far more brittle egos.
Icarus
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Date: 2006-01-21 06:12 am (UTC)Icarus