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I've ginsu-ed that semi-fic-sort-of-vignette-but-kinda-not-anything to such a degree that I should probably rename it. I was thinking "Stay Of Execution" as alternate, but I'm not sure if it... mumblemumble....

Anyhow, I've surgically implanted a plot, and now the fic is a fic. It is also completely different. It has angst. The tone and context has changed. Utterly changed. (Though I've kept most of the one-liners.)

There's one section that I think sucks, but it's not cooperating sooo, screw it.

Yes, I am editing in public. *eeeee!*

Title: Colony Atlantis
Fandom: SGA-ish, SG-1-ish (Now with more Jack TM)
Rating: R
Summary: Let's try this again -- This is what happens when Weir begins to build her vision of a utopia.


Colony Atlantis
By Icarus



Once the Wraith were beaten back, Atlantis was open for colonization. That is, for people who had the clearance to even know about the Stargate. Which, fortunately or unfortunately, she wasn't sure, severely limited the possible colonists.

Dr. Elizabeth Weir looked up from her first draft of the Atlantis Constitution. Stained glass windows poured colored light into her office.

The various Earth governments had seen fit to make her the governor of this colony. They, apparently, viewed her as someone who not only had done well in the face of the Wraith threat, but as one who was impartial enough to represent the interests of Earth and Atlantis, instead of just the United States. It was quite the compliment. She had the complete backing of the U.N. and Atlantis was called a territory of Earth.

Elizabeth stared down at the sheaf of papers in front of her. She understood now how the framers of the Constitution must have felt, that pull towards social engineering, hoping to create a utopia through her words alone. She knew it was impossible, that in reality she was only creating her own idea of utopia. But it was the only frame of reference she had, and so far, her sense of what was right and just had served her well. With one stroke of the pen she hoped to do away with many injustices she'd seen on Earth and other worlds. She itched to look at a copy of the U.S. Constitution, knowing now how it reflected its writers more than the politics of the time.

Elizabeth smiled. She also had to think of the present, and build in reasons for people from the SGC to come here to live, rather than to just do research and return. Luckily, sometimes those two aims intersected. Alongside provisions that would make a scientist weep with joy, she happily obliterated the legal basis in Atlantis for Don't Ask, Don't Tell.

~*~*~

"General," Jack smiled, offering him a beer. General Hammond demurred with a gesture, settling his hat on his lap. "You sure?"

"No, thank you."

Jack bounced onto the couch and popped off the lid of his beer, sending the cap flying across the room. The weather was nippy but Jack had built up the fire earlier, and the embers still carried a nice warm glow.

"So what's up?" Jack asked, cheerful. "I didn't even know you were in the neighborhood."

General Hammond took a hesitant breath. "This isn't a social call, Jack. Much as I'd prefer that it were." He leaned forward and toyed with the hat in his hands. "I don't know how to tell you this, but I suppose it's best I just get right to the point."

Jack cocked his head warily.

"Jack… several nights ago in Washington I was intercepted at a restaurant. I thought the gentleman was a reporter or a lobbyist and sent him on his way. But when I arrived home, I found a video tape in my doggie bag."

"And I bet your dog doesn't even like that movie," Jack joked.

But Hammond didn't laugh.

"I imagine not." He took a deep breath. "There was a message on my answering machine that suggested I watch that video type. I brought it for you if you like." He extracted a VHS cassette from the chair next to him. Jack had been wondering about that tape since Hammond arrived and had kept one eye on it.

"I've always preferred Beta myself…" Jack said. The General remained very serious. Jack hated serious. Serious meant bad news.

"The contents of that video tape are disturbing to say the least."

Jack nodded for him to continue, eyes narrowed as he took a sip of beer.

"It's clear to me that this video recording could easily be bogus. Certainly the technology exists to create such a thing."

Jack cut to the chase. "What's on the tape, George?"

George finally met his eyes. "It appears to show you and Dr. Jackson in an intimate relationship."

Jack paused. Then continued to sip his beer.

"Quite intimate."

"N.I.D.?" Jack asked casually.

George nodded. "Most likely. They've tried these sorts of tactics before." He shifted uncomfortably. "Now, if someone were to ask me, I would tell them that this sort of documentation could be faked. Those could be actors for all we know." The fire snapped in the silence.

"But…" Jack prompted. He could hear the 'but.'

"This would be pretty elaborate, even for the N.I.D." Hammond shook his head. "These days they're a shadow of what they once were, strapped for funding and facing an unprecedented amount of governmental oversight. I doubt they have the resources to expend, especially on something that's so easily dismissed."

"Could it be that 'Firm,' or whatever our new problem is called?"

"It's possible," the General acknowledged. "But it just doesn't… smell like them."

"No," Jack agreed.

"It's too personal and, might I say, petty."

Jack snorted. "Yes. You might say it. It's the N.I.D. for sure."

The log shifted in the fireplace and Jack wondered if he should get the poker out. He thoughtfully drank his beer instead. General Hammond stared at his hands.

"You haven't denied it, Jack," Hammond said gently.

Jack swallowed. He tried to lie, but the words just stuck in his craw. He couldn't do that to General Hammond. They'd started out with Hammond catching him in a lie about Abydos, and Jack didn't want to go there again.

"I'm a God-fearing man, Jack," he said in that soft, concerned, but firm voice.

At that moment, with a jolt, Jack knew his career was on the line. George Hammond was a Christian with a capital "C," and he wasn't the type who'd go to church every Sunday if he didn't mean it.

~*~*~

The next day Jack broke it off with Daniel.

"We've gotta cut it out," he said cryptically in Daniel's office.

Daniel didn't ask what he meant. "Okay," he said breezily, brushing Jack away from a pile of dusty ceramic Jack was trying to reassemble like a puzzle (messing up careful hours of work). "Whatever you say, Jack."

This wasn't the first time Jack had broken off their relationship. In fact, it wasn't even the thousandth. Early on, Daniel used to fight and argue with Jack every time he did this. But Jack could hold out in a verbal siege a very long time.

Eventually Daniel learned that just accepting Jack's nonsensical decisions shortened their "breaks," as Daniel called them ("Breaks" as linguistically distinct from "break-up," which they weren't, by virtue of the plural. A "break-up" was singular and therefore permanent. Elizabeth Taylor hadn't married the same man three times: she'd taken three breaks in a continuous relationship). When Daniel was patient, he found he didn't constantly fight Jack, and therefore, didn't give Jack ongoing reminders of traits that Jack didn't particularly like. As a result, said "breaks" lasted weeks instead of months.

It wasn't always Jack who broke it off, but it was always about Jack's career.

The make-up sex was spectacular and sordid, the sort one might expect if the world was about to end. So, perversely, Daniel started to look forward to it every time Jack broke it off with him. A little smile would start that made Jack look away in an effort not to laugh.

The best part was when Jack wrapped his arms around Daniel in vise-like grip, his forehead pressed to the back of Daniel's shoulder. Daniel would know Jack was his, and murmur, "I'm not going anywhere."

Daniel knew that what they had was good. It was good for Jack, which meant it was good for the team, which meant it was good for the SGC, which—in logical progression—meant that it was good for the whole galaxy. Even Thor said Daniel was "conducive to O'Neill's well-being." And he was right. When they were together Jack was lively and playful. The burden of command didn't seem to weigh on him; Daniel didn't know why.

As for Daniel… well, he was happier, sure, but empirical evidence showed he gained weight when he was with Jack, was less tired, drank less coffee (though mostly from Jack pulling it out of his hands) and yet, somehow, got just as much accomplished. Which made no sense at all because Jack was a constant buzzing distraction. It was good, and it was typical that an advanced civilization like the Asgard might see that, while their own backwards government could not.

But Daniel knew to let these arguments stay in his own head. Jack had to come around in his own time and in his own way.

"We need to talk. Later," Jack said, and Daniel nodded. Heartfelt discussions were part of the routine.

Over a steak at Shaunessy's Jack began in a tense if almost bright tone of voice, "Hammond paid me a visit."

And then all of the sudden it wasn't routine anymore.

~*~*~

General Hammond continued. "Now, I'm not one of those who think that they have the right to pass judgement on other people. That's God's responsibility, not mine, and I for one am glad of that. It seems a rather heavy burden."

Between one breath and the next Jack thought that only General George Hammond would have empathy for God. He waited for the other shoe to drop.

"But Jack, do you know why the NID had to go to the extreme of threatening my granddaughters to blackmail me several years back?" George asked. "It was because they had nothing else." He spread his empty hands.

"As the commanding officer of the SGC you have to be beyond reproach. Impeccable. Or else you put the entire Stargate program at risk by your actions. Are you prepared to do that?"

~*~*~

Returning to Daniel's house, Jack stepped inside to explain. "We just have to stop. No pussyfooting around this time."

Daniel looked up at him, the only hall lamp illuminating his face. "I realize that but think, Jack. How good is our track record?"

"Great." Jack folded his arms and shrugged, leaning back against the door. "When you were Ascended."

"Actually, uh, not on my end." Daniel scuffed his feet and looked at the hall rug. Jack gave him a quizzical look.

"Well, I don't remember much, but I think I spent a lot of time hanging around you." Daniel coughed. "I think if I could have used my powers to pull a sliver out of your hand, I would have."

Jack let his head fall back against the door. "We are so screwed."

~*~*~

The Atlantis Stargate engaged with a roar. Dr. Weir's IDC code was recognized and the gate lowered.

"She's back," Rodney grinned. He trailed Sheppard as they trampled down the stairs to greet her after the big U.N. meeting. She stepped through the gate smiling, which was a very good sign.

"So?" Sheppard prompted, as eager as a puppy. "How'd it go?"

"There were some eyebrows raised…." she said.

"I'll bet."

"And a lot of revisions."

"Of course," Sheppard bobbed his head with an air of 'come on, hurry it up' impatience.

She stopped and clasped her hands together, all but bouncing in place. "We have a Constitution."

Sheppard's mouth fell open. Then, a slow lop-sided smile spread across his face as he nodded. "Well I'd say that calls for a party."

"I'd say it calls for a yearly holiday," Weir said.

Rodney pressed forward. "Did you include all the ideas I gave you? The footnotes I think were particularly insightful…."

"They were very helpful and… extensive," she said, meeting Sheppard's eyes over the top of Rodney's head.

Rodney stared off into the distance, eyes suddenly vague and dazzled. "I helped write a Constitution. In addition to all my other accomplishments."

"Of course you did," Sheppard said.

"I'll be memorialized forever." Rodney broke his reverie. "Do we all get to sign with quill pens? I've been practicing."

~*~*~

Daniel's gaze was intense. Or more so than usual. "I have a solution, but… it's not ideal."

"The whole situation's 'not ideal,' Daniel."

Daniel sat down on the arm of the couch, folding his arms and balancing there. He chewed his lower lip, then said in a rush, "Let me go to Atlantis."

He shut his eyes, knowing the reaction.

"No." Jack didn't even miss a beat.

Daniel opened his mouth but Jack cut him off. "We need you here."

"No, you need me here. But need me to not be here even more than you need me to be here."

Jack frowned at him before spreading his arms. "In what universe does that even make sense?"

~*~*~

In retrospect, Elizabeth should have been less surprised that among the first wave of applications for Atlantean residency, under "J," was the highly qualified Dr. Daniel Jackson, Ph. D.

She signed and stamped that one right away, before he escaped or General O'Neill found out. She braced herself for a fight with the SGC even as she inwardly crowed over their coup. This was exactly the sort of thing she'd been hoping for.

~*~*~

"Jack," Daniel raised his hands in a quelling gesture. "You can follow me when you're ready."

"No." Jack's tone was flat and dead certain.

"I've already filled out the application."

"You what?" Jack paced. "You son of a bitch! You can't even wait till Carter makes General?!"

"What?"

"So I can hand over the SGC to Carter!" Jack repeated.

"Is that what you've been waiting for?"

"Yes!" Jack glowered at Daniel, inches from his face. "I suck at this. Or haven't you noticed?"

Daniel said into the kiss, his lips and breath moving against Jack's, "Yeah, you kinda do."

~*~*~

Jack bowed his head. Of the all the ways to be caught out, this gentle talk from General Hammond was not what he'd expected. It was somehow worse than his worst-case scenarios—more than one of which featured him being shot.

"General… off the record?" Jack said at last.

"This is all off the record," George assured him.

"What if it's something… what if it's not a matter of willingness, and more a matter of, say, ability? You want to, and you've tried. A lot. But you just can't."

"I don't believe that's true, Jack. Or else I wouldn't be here."

"I know you don't."

"You have a choice. Your lifestyle is a matter of personal choice. It's as simple as that."

Jack swung the beer bottle between his fingertips, unable to look George in the eye. Finally he said, "Would you be disappointed in me if I couldn't?"

"You were my first choice for this job. I'm certain you have it in you." George sighed. "But Lord knows, I can't make you do what you don't want to do, Jack. I've learned that on many an occasion over the years. If you honestly believe that you can't, then, if I were you, I would resign."

~*~*~

Half-awake in Daniel's bed, it dawned on Jack that he hadn't even held out for an hour. Damn it!

Jack sat up. He'd talked to the General only, what? A day ago?

They'd fallen asleep with the lights still on. Daniel was sprawled naked half under the sheets, his head slumped to the side. He stirred, soft eyelashes fluttering. "Jack…."

That sleepy voice awoke warm places in Jack that he barely even knew existed when Daniel wasn't around.

Daniel gave a low grunt as he leaned up on an elbow, the motion groggy and uncertain. He sniffed a little, squinting as he did when he was waking up. "Jack. Have you thought… maybe Sam doesn't need your help."

Jack wondered if that was taking the coward's way out.

~*~*~

Then Elizabeth got to "O," for "O'Neill, Brig. General J.," and stopped.

The name on the form was "Jonathan" but the alternate name was listed as "Jack." There were a lot of skipped questions and parts were illegible. Still, it didn't matter; she'd recognize that scrawl anywhere: She had the general's Bon Voyage note framed in her office.

Wondering what this meant, she signed it, and radioed Sheppard. "John." She heard him grunt in response, obviously busy. "I'd like you to give the grand tour for the next batch of immigrants."

"Can't someone else do that? I really don't have time to mess with a bunch of guests." He said the word like it meant "cockroaches."

"Oh, I think you'll want to do this one," she smiled, and debated whether she should warn him or let him be as shocked as she'd been.

~*~*~

The Stargate whooshed to life. John Sheppard hovered on the edge of the platform, nervously shifting between standing at ease to swinging his arms, looking for all the world like an eager schoolboy.

The general staggered through, a simple Air Force dufflebag slung over his shoulder. His white head glanced back at the wormhole almost accusingly.

"It didn't feel any different," he said in a tone of amazement.

Dr. Jackson emerged beside him, carrying way too much stuff. Four or five straps criss-crossed his shoulders in addition to the laptop and a suitcase in his hand.

"It was a whole galaxy. Shouldn't it have felt different?"

"Huh?" Dr. Jackson said. He dropped his bags almost immediately to tie his shoe. "You went to the galaxy of Aida when we met the Asgard." He glanced up at the general and squinted. "You tell me."

"I don't remember that," the general admitted.

He waved to John then, seeming way more relaxed than John had ever seen him. Of course, the fact that he was in BDUs instead of a full dress uniform inspecting a base probably helped. "Hey! You must be the welcoming committee. Sheppard, right?"

"I am, sir," John grinned, rocking back on his heels. Until he remembered his manners. "Can I help you with your bag?"

"Nah." He gave John that familiar tight smile as he hoisted the dufflebag a little higher. "But I think we need a full train of pack mules for Daniel here."

"I got it, I got it…." Dr. Jackson waved him off as he stood. "Oh hey, there's no klaxon."

"Yeah, I noticed that." The general frowned around at the gateroom. "Isn't it kinda dark around here?"

"Well, it's still early Atlantis time. We dim them at night to—" John began.

All the lights abruptly brightened. Startled technicians sat up in their chairs, checking to see what had gone wrong.

"Ah," the general blinked. "That's better. Thank you."

John stared at him in confusion. He hadn't done anything.

"So." The general clapped his hands together. "I hear you've got an ocean."

~*~*~

John had never met anyone who had the ATA gene as strong as his own. Watching the general walk through Atlantis waking things up that usually only responded to him… well, it was a little like having your dog suddenly happily play with a stranger. On the one hand it was nice; but on the other hand, you felt like Hey…. That's my dog. Though it was pretty funny watching him jump at ordinary things.

"Last stop," John announced, opening the door to the general's spacious one-bedroom suite.

It had a larger than average living room, a little kitchen and extra den. Plus, there was a balcony off the bedroom with a perfect view of the water. John considered it a good choice. Boxes of the general's stuff were already lined up against one wall. The General started picking things up and putting them down at random. A wall panel lit at his touch. He blinked, startled, and it shut off again.

"One of the best rooms in the house," John added, "if you don't mind a bit of a walk to the transporters."

Dr. Jackson dumped his bags with a tired sigh and sagged against the door.

General O'Neill watched interestedly, eyes alight, as John revealed and explained the holographic climate control panels. He didn't seem nervous about this part. Of course, they'd remind any pilot of a heads-up display.

"Huh," he said. "Can you play video games with these?"

"Well no, though—" At that moment another, bluer hologram dropped down from the ceiling and the lights dimmed. The numbers were in Ancient, but the targets were fairly clear. John forgot his earlier jealousy because, hey, video game! "Cool!"

"I've got the blue… things…" the general said, pulling up a box. John pulled up another one.

Dr. Jackson looked between them helplessly. "I'll be, uh… never mind." He popped open the bathroom door and disappeared.

As John proceeded to totally kick the general's ass, O'Neill leaned over and asked, "Can we get beer out of this thing?"

"I tried that." John pursed his lips, turning his head as he took out two more of the general's blue blobs. "It didn't work."

The general nodded sagely. "It's never a perfect world."

~*~*~

By the time John had completely slaughtered the general at this new game, he'd worked up the nerve to ask the sixty-four thousand dollar question. Dr. Jackson was opening boxes and unpacking dishes carefully wrapped in newspaper. John stared at the newsprint, evidence of a faraway world.

"So. What brings you to Atlantis?"

John said it lightly, but the entire original expedition team was puzzled. They had a million theories, ranging from General O'Neill taking over the base command (Rodney's very disturbing idea), to his looking for a place to retire and surf (Carson's thought, though it was a little hard to imagine the general surfing).

"I confess no one was a bit surprised that Dr. Jackson wanted to come, but there's been a little curiosity about what you're, ah, looking to do in the Pegasus galaxy."

"Oh. I dunno…" General O'Neill said, letting out a breath as he leaned his elbows on his knees. "I thought I'd just… have a look around. See what's out here."

His head jerked up, attention caught by something across the room. "You said there are windows in the bedroom?" He didn't wait for an answer but made a beeline for them.

John stared after him, bemused, and wondered if the general himself knew what he was doing here. He stuffed his hands in his pockets thinking out loud, "He's gonna seriously get in my hair, isn't he?"

Dr. Jackson wrinkled his nose and nodded, "Yeah. I'd count on it."

John reached for one of Dr. Jackson's bags. "Can I help you find your quarters? They've gotta be on the chart somewhere."

Dr. Jackson squinted at him with a too-piercing look. "Um." He licked his lips. "These are my quarters, actually." He didn't take his steady eyes off John's face.

John knew it was rude, but nothing could scrape his jaw off the floor. It just kept hanging open. "A general?!"

O'Neill returned, wind-blown and enthusiastic. "Daniel, there's a helluva view out there!"

His eyes shifted quickly from Daniel to John and back again. His shoulders drooped. "You told him."

"What am I supposed to be, a secret?" Dr. Jackson said a little testily.

O'Neill ran a hand over his face with a frustrated gesture. "It's no one's business."

"Um," and John was proud of the fact he had finally managed to close his mouth, "I've gotta tell you that if this is supposed to be private…" John was at a loss for words. "Atlantis is a big place, but it is an island."

"It's all right," O'Neill waved off his warning, though he looked very far from all right. He rubbed his eyes. "I've been in the military a long time, Sheppard. It'll be all over the place in a day."

"Try an hour." John arched his eyebrows. "This is Atlantis, sir. It's like a small town. Only smaller."

~*~*~

General O'Neill and Dr. Jackson successfully made their way to the mess hall, something that John made everyone do on their own, sort of as a little test. If they didn't show up for lunch, he knew they needed a refresher on the transporter system.

They looked… quaint, actually, staring around like tourists as they slowly found the trays and joined the chow line. The general actually sniffed one of the desserts and John heard a distant "what the hell is that?" as Dr. Jackson rolled his eyes in patient embarrassment. Jackson hovered protectively over General O'Neill, and John wondered briefly who was top and who was bottom.

He abruptly wiped that thought from his mind. He so didn't want to go there. It was weird being military in Atlantis after Weir instituted her policy. There was a surprisingly high percentage of gay Marines. John would have expected more Navy guys to tell the truth.

The general spotted John and steered towards his table. Apparently the argument had continued all the way there. "Jack, it's another planet. Didn't you think they'd have different food?"

"No…" General O'Neill said petulantly. Though John noticed he'd picked the dessert in question, which was a good sign. Some people left because of the food.

"So how's it going your first day?" John asked, waving to Rodney whose tray was already overloaded.

"Strange," O'Neill replied with blunt honesty. "Very strange. Glowing steps. Weird… food," he seemed reluctant to use the term. He leaned over the table and said in a stage whisper, "And everyone keeps looking at us."

Dr. Jackson sighed elaborately. "They're not looking at us for any particular reason, Jack, except maybe that we're new. That kind of paranoia just a normal psychological reaction to—"

"Ooo, gay general! Who knew?"

Rodney plunked his tray next to General O'Neill's and was already eating as he sat.

"I bet the Air Force is really pissed at you."

John stared at him, open-mouthed. At the general's cold glare he spread his hands and mouthed: I didn't--!

Dr. Jackson blinked rapidly and finished his sentence. "—of course, I could be wrong…."

Rodney stopped chewing for a moment, catching John's impatient look. "Oh, it's okay, Colonel. The general and I go way back to the good ol' days at the SGC, eh?" He grinned.

"Rodney," General O'Neill growled. And he did seem to know McKay. "You know. I forgot you were here." He said it like this would be a good reason to go back to Earth.

Then it hit John. If people knew about the general and Dr. Jackson, they couldn't go back. He was floored by the gamble the two had taken. Suddenly it didn't seem so far-fetched that the crotchety old general and this over-eager academic had been two of the first through the Stargate.

They were insane. They didn't even know if they liked it here.

"Does this mean that Colonel Carter is available?" Rodney was saying. "Because I always got the sense that she had the hots for, ah, you know…." He gestured meaningfully with his spoon at the general. "A little spring-winter romance?"

"She's married. And not to you." The general took a bite of his dessert.

"Ah well, I'll just wait for the inevitable divorce then." Rodney leaned on the table and stared off wistfully into the distance. "I'll bet she's a hellcat."

Weir found their table and was positively beaming.

"Hello, and welcome to Atlantis!" She settled her tray next to John's. "I heard about you two. That's wonderful news, exactly what I wanted for Atlantis: freedoms not found anywhere else," she breathed.

Uh-oh, John thought. Here we go….

"The Althosians don't make any distinction in their wedding customs. It's a beautiful ceremony. I've already officiated at several."

Her smile broadened. John had been learning over the last month how she loved to 'stick it to the man' with dramatic public gestures.

Barely audible, the general mumbled, "This is not happening…."

Dr. Jackson cringed in his direction and said, "We, uh, were planning to be a little more… low-key."

"A lot more low-key." The general glowered at them.

Carson found their table. "I heard the good news. I think it's lovely," he said with soft eyes and that soft Scottish burr. "Much better than surfing."

Dr. Jackson gave him a funny look. John quickly explained, "We, uh, had a bet on why the general here was coming to Atlantis."

"Oh."

"Who won?" the general asked them.

"Um, no one actually. This caught us pretty much by surprise."

Zelenka slipped into the seat beside Dr. Jackson and briefly introduced himself. "Dr. Jackson, we are so glad you have come." He shook Dr. Jackson's hand. "We have number of translations that are beyond hopeless." He turned to the general. "And you have this ATA gene, yes?"

Rodney looked up from his plate. "No he doesn't—oh. Wait. He does!" His eyes widened and glazed over with the possibilities. "I forgot, he defended Earth from the chair in Antarctica!"

Zelenka nodded briskly, stabbing into his vegetables. "Before you are becoming too busy we have many, many needs for you. After lunch, my lab, is good? Rodney will show you where."

"I don't have time to play Tour Guide," Rodney complained to Zelenka.

"You eat and you talk. It is inefficient. I will finish before you."

"Yes but—"

"You are going there anyway!"

Rodney caved, tipping his head. "True."

"Now see," General O'Neill pointed at Zelenka, "this guy I like."

"Trust me, General," Weir said with an expansive smile. "We can keep you very busy in Atlantis." She included Dr. Jackson in her gaze. "Both of you."

~*~*~

Jack had the windows open, which always made Daniel complain since it blew papers all over the place. But the air was fresh and clean, and the noise of the waves made this Atlantis feel a little bit more real.

The Daedalus was due to dock. Which meant more books for Daniel. Jack was thinking they should've gotten a bigger place, especially when Daniel didn't go for the whole "building furniture out of books" idea. Jack was sure the phrasebooks would've made great coasters.

Daniel leaned against Jack, squeezing his shoulder. Then gave him a little pat as he left for the bedroom.

The thumping sound was startling.

Glancing up and all around, it took Jack a minute to place the fact that it was a knock. No one here knocked; they used the door panel-thingys. Jack crossed the room and touched the door open. Technically he could have opened it from anywhere, but call him an old dog, even after weeks he had to at least touch a door before it opened, or else it seemed… weird. Like the walls were alive.

"Hello, Jack."

A familiar figure waited in the hallway, holding a small white plastic bag of the sort you saw in any drugstore on Earth, and nowhere on Atlantis.

"George," Jack reeled in surprise before finally waving him in. "Just happened to be in the neighborhood-?"

Hammond laughed. "Something like that. I thought I'd drop by and say hello."

"Well…" Jack found he didn't know what to do with his hands. "Uh, yeah. Hello."

He realized the chairs—and most of the tables for that matter—were largely full of Daniel's shit, so Jack started moving stuff randomly to make a space. "As you can see, I've learned to work around the leaning towers of Pisa here—Daniel!" he shouted over his shoulder.

"Yeah?" came the voice from the other room.

"Books on the couch—priceless artifacts or just crap?"

"Put your feet on them again and you're dead." Daniel padded in irritably from the bedroom and stopped, dumbfounded as he caught sight of the General. "Oh, hi. General Hammond… I didn't—I didn't realize you were even here."

"A bit of a surprise visit."

"He's checking in to see if you haven't corrupted me yet." Jack realized he'd moved things but hadn't actually cleared any space, so he let his hands drop to his sides. "As you can see, nothing's changed. Except…" he indicated the room, "…messier. Bet you didn't know you'd have to dig me out first—Daniel, give the man a place to sit or tell me what I can move without upsetting the natural order of the universe."

"Um." Daniel studied his stacks with a doubtful flick of his eyes. "You'd better let me handle it."

"I'm afraid I can't stay long," George confessed.

"No, no, stay," they both protested at once, and Daniel scrambled to quickly clear a space, saying, "Here, I got it…."

Jack slumped to the odd ergnomic couch, slinging his arm across the back. A chair appeared from under the clutter as Daniel shifted a pile to the kitchen, shoving it onto the countertop with a muttered curse.

George Hammond sighed as he sat. "I can't tell you how good it feels just to sit down. I swear I've been on my feet all day."

Daniel sat gingerly on the couch next to Jack, seemingly unaware of the arm stretched out behind him.

"So how are things working out here?" George asked.

The two of them looked at each other. "Good."

"Great."

"Never better."

What made it great wasn't an item on the menu, which killed that conversation pretty quick.

"So…" Jack said. "How's the new SGC commander?"

He immediately winced and regretted asking.

"Fine, he's fine. But frankly he's not as good as you were, Jack," George said. "He just doesn't have your experience."

"Good. Great! I hope he screws up royally." Jack frowned as his imagination elaborated on that scenario. "In a, ah, non-lethal sort of way, that doesn't… well, anyway…." Jack trailed off in embarrassment.

"I'd say they certainly miss you at the SGC. We all do."

"Yeah," Daniel said with an ironic smile, "too bad going back would involve a hearing."

"Yes," George said. "Oh, before I forget." He drew out the plastic bag. "I brought you two a little house-warming gift. Better late than never, I always say."

"Beer! George. You shouldn't have." Jack wasted no time popping the caps off three bottles.

"We're drinking a small fortune here," Daniel observed, unrepentant as he took a deep swallow. "Have you any idea what beer's worth in Atlantis?"

"If it's anything like the going rate during the Korean war, I can well imagine."

"Worth bushels of tava beans. Bushels," Jack said with a dramatic gesture.

General Hammond chuckled, and then gave a contented sigh. "I can't tell you how good it is to see you two."

A warm comfortable silence descended.

"So," Jack began, leaning forward. "How's the grandkids?"

"Yeah, and—" Daniel interrupted, scootching to the edge of the couch. "—what about Sam? She was working on this naquada particle accelerator when we left."

"Well, it turned out that it was naquadriah she needed… now hold on there," George took a long sip of his beer, "there's a bit of a story to tell with this one…."




ETA: Did I spoil all the fun? I did say it was different.

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Date: 2006-01-19 09:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] not-sally.livejournal.com
oh my god.
If I had hated this version, this line:
"Do we all get to sign with quill pens? I've been practicing."
would have made it worthy.
Luckily, not only I didn't hate it, I absolutely love it.

I can't believe you managed to create two fics from basically one story. Even the way you re-arranged some paragraphs was masterful.

I loved the previous version because it was so light and funny and sweet, but you managed to create this more realistic, and raw version without sacrificing those things, which is simply amazing.

In short, again, I'm in total and complete awe.

Date: 2006-01-19 10:19 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
That's really kind of you to say. I've seen [livejournal.com profile] resonant8 mention in her story notes about dramatic re-writes, and my Creative Writing teacher said it's important to not get attached to your original idea. "Don't be too precious about it. Make drastic changes to your first draft."

This was drastic all right. The section with Sheppard may be too long and structurally speaking out of balance with the new parts of the story. I think I need some cut-aways to different POVs. Perhaps. The sharp jumps in time and perspective jangles the nerves the way Jack and Daniel are living a little dangerously, sleeping together. So it might be all right for that rhythm to smooooooth out once they arrive in Atlantis.

Thank you. This encourages me to be more flexible with edits and changes (my betas thank you). Even it had sucked (which I'm glad you don't think so) the experiment is a success.

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-19 10:07 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] dubhartach.livejournal.com
Heh, for you and Jack I read Atlantis fic! Liked the first version of this and the extra bits added here are excellent.

Oh, loved The Walls of Jericho (that Jack has certainly influenced how I see/read him to some degree) and am finding your recs list invaluable, thank you.

Date: 2006-01-19 07:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
I know what you mean. I swore up and down I would never defect. But my resolve only lasted a day. ;)

It's funny you should mention Jericho, because I almost wrote this one in a series of vignettes, the way Jericho was written last year. (That was only supposed to be a drabble... 37 drabbles later....) I realized I didn't have the energy or concentration to do that with this fic, so I decided to backfill the story instead.

As for the rec-list, I've 11 more fics to add to it. Plus I've been hearing my Komos links are going to her (locked) LJ. Whoops. I don't think her LJ was originally locked. I should probably check my other links to see if they're still live.

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-19 11:00 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] sid
Hi Icarus! I've found my way to LJ, after resisting the temptation as long as I could. :-)
I never saw the original story you refer to, but I can tell you that this one is great! Love George here - supportive and caring even when he doesn't agree and can't understand. Very nice indeed.

Sid

Date: 2006-01-19 07:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
George can't understand. As a sincere Christian of a particular stripe he truly believes that homosexuality is a lifestyle choice.

In the HP fandom there is enough anti-Christian sentiment (I'm Buddhist but I know quite a few Christian slashers) that it felt good to portray a decent Christian. And George is, canon-wise. Even though he doesn't get why Jack can't break it off, he's still a good person -- partially because of his beliefs.

Welcome to LJ, Sid. You'll need to rearrange the furniture because you're never getting up from behind the computer again.

(And I can't tell you how happy I was to discover the Dinner series was slash and not just a misunderstanding.)

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-19 11:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sffan.livejournal.com
Didn't spoil the fun at all! It's like you put the whipped cream on the hot chocolate.

Date: 2006-01-19 07:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
*laughs* So plot is a good thing? *winks*

I'm glad I didn't spoil it. I ended up cutting a lot less than I intended. The story might be better if I did cut more, I'm not sure.

*hovers with the scissors, hands shaking*

Can't do it.

Icarus

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Date: 2006-01-19 11:35 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bagheera-san.livejournal.com
I like this better! General Hammond was such a very good addition to the story. I really like the scene with him and Jack, about the tape. The way you've structurised it, jumping between scenes and arranging them not in chronological order, but in a way that shows which parts of the conversations are relevant for each other is a nice touch.

This live editing is cool. Almost educational :D

Date: 2006-01-19 07:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
This is the first time I've ever used that sort of structure. I admit, I used it partially because the other option was writing a looooooong fic and I knew I didn't have the time or energy.

I debated whether I should split up the scene where Weir is looking through the applications. I liked how it flowed together better in the original, but I didn't like how long Jack and Daniel's debate would become if I put all of it together and had it precede Weir looking through the applications.

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-19 11:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] celestialseason.livejournal.com
This is really great. I really like the way you expanded on the idea of Jack and Daniel going to Atlantis, nice bit of angst there. I like the original snippet because it's fun, and I like this one because it's got a nice angsty plot mixed in with the fun. Thanks for sharing.

Date: 2006-01-19 07:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
I was worried that the angst might've killed the fun. You can't help but cringe when Jack and Daniel get to the mess hall once you know what they've been through. I was probably too attached to that scene. Carson's line about the surfing should probably be killed -- it throws the rhythm a bit, though I did like bringing back the SGA team's debate about why Jack emmigrated. I brought out the proverbial knife in the prior scene, so I probably needed to use it. ;)

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-19 02:25 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] lurksnomore
I think I like this version better. I really like Hammond showing up at the end, bringing news (gossip) from home and gift that is shared. Healing rifts is a good thing. It was a definite 'Awwww" moment. Over all, it is generally tighter with a clear arc that resolves well. *Yay! Icarus fic!*

Date: 2006-01-19 08:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Cool. Thank you. That was what I was hoping for, that adding a plot could only improve the fic (and not kill it entirely). The mood has definitely shifted.

This is a first. Usually when I do total re-writes the result is... not good.

That icon... *goggles* It's weird how much I like it. No doubt it's a photo-manip.

Icarus

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Date: 2006-01-19 03:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ladyflowdi.livejournal.com
Oh, how I loved this. Crossover fic is the best, and this one was so, so great :) I loved John's reaction to Jack's ability to play with Atlantis, and Rodney's big mouth, adn the bet! Hehehe. The only thing that was missing was McShep, but the Danny/Jack was so good I forgot all about it :)

Very nice.

Date: 2006-01-19 09:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
I normally don't go for crossovers but since the tie between SG-1 and SGA is in canon, I can do this. It's only a crossover for those unfamiliar with one or the other show, though I guess it's more SGA than it is SG-1 --

-- wait, hear me out. The characters of Jack, Daniel and Hammond all appear in SGA. But John, Carson and Zelenka never appear in SG-1.

Hmm. Which means I ought to paint in physical descriptions to flesh out those three for SG-1 readers.

I was soooo tempted to put in the McShep, but I always try to avoid what I call "Slashworld: where everyone is happy and gay." I participated in an RPG that was Slashworld and occasionally I'd look up from what we were writing and wince.

It was going to only be a subtle hint anyway, buried in Weir's motives to remove Don't Ask, Don't Tell.

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-19 03:17 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] mad_maudlin
Icarus, for you, I read Stargate fics. And this was brilliant.

Date: 2006-01-19 10:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Thank you. You know my regard for your opinion, too.

*puzzled look* You're sure Chomsky's not a god?

Icarus

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Date: 2006-01-19 03:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gurrier.livejournal.com
"Ooo, gay general! Who knew?"

My love for Rodney know no bounds. And Jack playing with Atlantis - poor John!

Date: 2006-01-20 12:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Same here. I really do want to write more fic around him, and I've seen all of season one. But somehow, those --

-- ah. I do have something I can post. Then I can add the second part later.

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-19 06:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] teaphile.livejournal.com
Love the conversation between Jack and Hammond. That kind of circumspection is always fun to read.

Although I loved the original, I find this version much more believable as to why Jack and Daniel went to Atlantis. I think they have too much sense of duty to just leave Earth like that without a good reason, and Jack would certainly think he was more useful active in Atlantis than retired on Earth.

Date: 2006-01-20 12:32 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Love the conversation between Jack and Hammond. That kind of circumspection is always fun to read.

Aha! Thank you. I based it on "Secrets" when Jack handled that reporter superbly. Jack is certainly able to lie without lying. But it was clear he preferred misleading (and distracting) truths rather than bald-faced falsehood. With General Hammond, he made a choice to not lie. Though he did keep it hypothetical.

Jack would certainly think he was more useful active in Atlantis than retired on Earth.

It was the best way to handle a bad situation.

Also, Jack really didn't want to give up his rank, though legally things have just gotten really complicated. You know the U.S. Air Force at the very least wants to revoke his pension.

Weir has opened a real can of worms. A little backstory here: she argued for a separate constitution and system of law for Atlantis because of the contradictions between the laws of various governments, and "we in Atlantis are dealing with legal situations unprecedented on Earth." It was also the only way the other nations--currently distrustful of the U.S.--would allow a significant U.S. military force in Atlantis.

That was the deal. The U.S. keeps up its sole military presence, and gives up having legal control of the region (a control that's tenuous at best anyway). Otherwise the other nations were going to send their own military representatives, which would be real headache for Weir and military concern for the U.S.

One concession that Weir fought for was that U.S. soldiers would be bound by Atlantean law over military law. That's a big step. But she argued the expense of sending soldiers back through a Stargate to another galaxy was untenable, not to mention the fact of sending alien witnesses to Earth:

"How can we risk aliens testifying in U.S. courts when the stargate project is classified? What about any risk of contagions? Would we have to set up a separate military court for the Atlantis project? How many people would be needed to run those courts and what are the security risks to the project's secrecy?"

The difficulties were clear. The fact that she made descrimination against Atlantean law in the Constitution (which had to be approved by the U.N.), then made the U.S. military bound to follow Atlantean law (which had to be negotiated in a gantlet of talks with the U.S. and the U.N. Security Council)... well, she knew what she was doing, but the military missed it. Because these were two separate documents approved through two separate processes, that were running concurrently.

It's not just a nice gesture on her part.

The U.S. recognized that a third of the population in Atlantis was military and held in reserve the option to sieze military control of the base. Their excuse (a valid one) is that they held the stargate, and that it was stupid to bring in soldiers from various nationalities. (Please note that I have not seen season two.)

By allowing gay soldiers to keep their rank (according to Atlantean law) Weir was bringing in a U.S. military presence that had reason to be loyal to Atlantis. If push came to shove, they wouldn't want to risk losing rank everything.

Of course, all the military has to do is not let gay soldiers through the gate, right? Um, the trouble is, the soldiers seem perfectly straight and have clean records... right up until they arrive in Atlantis. This makes Atlantis something of a joke, their soldiers nick-named the "Pink Army" and creates its own problems, but the fact that some of these soldiers are like General O'Neill, with high rank and good reputations helps quite a bit.

But while this snippet is idyllic, it's a bit of a mess.

More than you ever wanted to know, right?

Icarus

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Date: 2006-01-19 06:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] monzz.livejournal.com
Oh, wow... this is wonderful :) I'm not really into Atlantis, but this had plenty of the original SG1 to get me interested, and was great enough to keep me reading until the end. I like.

Date: 2006-01-19 07:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Thank you. Should I rename it "The Fic You Use To Get Your SG-1 Friends Into Atlantis"?

This version has a lot more Jack and Daniel in it. And now I'm wondering if the first fic is more appealing to the SGA fans and this one to SG-1. One thing the other one had that this doesn't is the sense of seeing Jack and Daniel completely from the perspective of SGA. Having the secret of why they emmigrated revealed spun the situation so I suspect you couldn't help seeing Atlantis from their POV, even when we switch perspectives. The mess hall scene becomes less sweet and more wince-worthy.

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-19 09:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] skipmcgee.livejournal.com
I have literally a minute to say everything I like about this story, so let's see how this turns out.

Jack and Daniel should have more happily ever after stories, they certainly deserve it. Rodney should spend as much time around Jack as possible, just for entertainment value. Daniel should always leave his books out, 'cause you never know when he'll need one of them.

Lots of fun all around.

Date: 2006-01-20 01:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Oh thank you! You know, I've often been in a position of scrambling out the door as I've just finished a fic (what? me get caught up in fic when I should be getting dressed/doing homework/eating?). Thanks for taking the time.

Jack and Daniel should have more happily ever after stories, they certainly deserve it.

Agreed.

Rodney should spend as much time around Jack as possible, just for entertainment value.

Provided Jack doesn't actually carry out those thoughts of Rodney's imminent demise that seem to occur to him.

Daniel should always leave his books out, 'cause you never know when he'll need one of them.

The problem is, you can never tell which one's important, and which one's just old with a million copies in print.

But Jack's a slob, so he's used to... working around things... and at least Daniel washes the dishes every night.

Icarus

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Date: 2006-01-20 05:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tafkarfanfic.livejournal.com
You know what I like about this version better than the first one? Besides the fact that you treat the topic seriously? I think you give better Rodney in this one.

Date: 2006-01-20 07:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
I think you give better Rodney in this one.

(Rodney voice:) Really?

Okay, you'll like the Rodney tidbit I posted a minute ago. Though the second part is turning a little strange....

Icarus

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Date: 2006-01-20 07:38 am (UTC)
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Really enjoyed this, and appreciated the extrapolation, including in the comments. What a great way this would be for it to go.

Date: 2006-01-20 07:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Thank you, I still need to run it past a beta and there's one section that really needs work.

I should probably f-lock when I'm editing in public, shouldn't I? It is rather... pornographic.

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-20 01:20 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] toniabarone.livejournal.com
Oh hell no! This was so much better. LOVED th' Jack/Daniel backstory. It works. Thanks for this!

Date: 2006-01-21 06:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Then we have a consensus: we have a story, and it's worthy of being beta'd and posted.

Now... *Icarus begins groveling search for beta*

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-20 06:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_minxy_/
Wow, I like this. Didn't read the first version, so I can't speak to that, but the sense of danger, of walking an edge, is really nicely done. The humor and warmth of people is a fantastic counterpoint and just very nicely continuously reminds you of why it's worth it.

Plus, I really really like the relationship with Hammond. I like that he loves them, but has to ignore the gay relationship because it just doesn't compute on several levels, but being Hammond, he will not judge. That is multilayered and realistic and wonderful and I love it.

Plus, can I just say, thank God for Zelenka not giving a shit. Jack's discomfort was palpable, though as a slap upside the head that 'hey you are out of the closet now!' it was fantastic.

I liked this a lot. Yeah.

Date: 2006-01-21 06:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Jack's discomfort was palpable, though as a slap upside the head that 'hey you are out of the closet now!' it was fantastic.

Oh cool -- Zelenka's all business, and for Jack that reminded him of a large part of the reason he'd come to Atlantis: here he'd still be allowed to do his job. In... whatever form that may be (Jack has no idea but is happy to have something to do right away).

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-20 06:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_minxy_/
I have some trouble with Elizabeth sometimes, because she seems to be flying by the seat of her pants and the civilian/military relationship being tenuous at best is such a major part of her story that it's rare to see her succeeding and being really competant.

I love this snippet just for Wier's intelligence and aptitude. Plus points that she understands the play between that kind of freedom and loyalty is MARVELOUS.

Date: 2006-01-21 06:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Plus points that she understands the play between that kind of freedom and loyalty is MARVELOUS.

Well, as some people pointed out, there's still plenty of room for things to go belly up. On the other hand, drafting treaties and negotiating is her specialty after all. So here we're dealing with her strengths.

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-20 08:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] whisper99.livejournal.com
This is FANTASTIC! Please tell me there is more!

Date: 2006-01-21 06:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Thank you. *g* Watch this journal. I don't see any more full-length stories coming from this, but I may post a snippet, drabble, or vignette. Just for fun.

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-20 08:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gobsmackit.livejournal.com
I read both bits, and I don't think you spoiled the fun, just grounded it a little! It's a great concept, and I love the way you've written everyone's reactions to the situation - from Jack to Zalenka, each character was so right. Great character moments (Sheppard's...would it be called jealousy? and I can just see Weir writing mischievously), and you've done what I love about good SGA fic, having fun with the way the characters interact with Atlantis itself.

Date: 2006-01-21 06:28 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Sheppard's...would it be called jealousy?

Hmm, I think possessiveness might be the right term. Atlantis is "his" in a way he never noticed until it wasn't his, completely, anymore.

what I love about good SGA fic, having fun with the way the characters interact with Atlantis itself.

Oh, me too. That's my favourite. I still owe [livejournal.com profile] thegrrrl an exploring!Atlantis fic.

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-21 05:29 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vileseagulls.livejournal.com
It is EVEN MORE PERFECT.


CAPSLOCK PERFECT.


Hee.


Although you can't stop there - tell us more about George, and Jack and Daniel's life on Atlantis. :D

Date: 2006-01-21 06:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Hooray, CAPSLOCK!

That means a lot given you're not keen on Jack/Daniel. And yeah, I could go for more Jack/Daniel domestic scenes. Or Jack taking a jumper out for a test-flight with Sheppard:

"Nice, huh?" Sheppard grinned. It was interesting the General didn't freak out about this, but the life-signs monitor had bothered him, You can know where I am at all times?

"Smooth as glass," the General smirked.

They dipped through a cloudbank, and Sheppard could feel the way General Jack O'Neill liked to fly: as fast as possible, with delicate course corrections. You get there, but you barely knew how fast. Everyone had their own style, developed from the kinds of missions they flew. The General had likely flown long-distance recon, Sheppard guessed, fast and high.

"Too bad you can't make 'em look like an F-16," the General commented, and Sheppard nodded.

"Yep. Little puddlejumpers," he said. And the General laughed.


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I really enjoyed this.

Date: 2006-01-21 06:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] yayaness16.livejournal.com
I didn't read the first version, so I hope I didn't miss anything good.

Probably not, since i loved this version sooo damn much! It's so sweet - I'm getting cavities! There needs to be more happy Jack/Daniel's in this world.

I especially enjoy the way you portray them. Jack + Daniel = Happy and comfortable, so much so, that they can't live without each other. ::sighs happily::

Jack and Daniel FOREVER! On Earth... on Atlantis... Wherever. Love them. Love you.

I Would also like to request (or plead) a possible continuum of this lovely story.

Thank you and goodnight.

Re: I really enjoyed this.

Date: 2006-01-21 10:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Well, I don't have any real plans to continue this story, but I do have a vignette based in this world:


"Nice, huh?" Sheppard grinned.

It was interesting the General didn't freak out about flying a jumper, but the life-signs monitor had really bothered him. You mean you can know where I am at all times? The General had glared at the monitor like he wanted to break it.

Sheppard had answered a little defensively as he pulled it to safety, Well, it's not like we know what you're doing.

"Smooth as glass," the General smirked.

They dipped through a cloudbank, and Sheppard could feel the way General Jack O'Neill liked to fly: at high velocity, with delicate course corrections. You get there, but you barely knew how quick. Everyone had their own style, developed from the kinds of missions they flew. The General had likely flown long-distance Recon, Sheppard guessed. Fast and high.

He himself tended to take sudden turns. All those times dodging mountains (among other things…) in Afghanistan.

"Too bad you can't make 'em look like an F-16," the General commented, and Sheppard nodded agreement.

"Yep. Little puddlejumpers," Sheppard said. And the General laughed.


Icarus

Date: 2006-01-21 07:35 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] abbylee
I have no idea how I stumbled here, but I'm very thankful. I tend to read more SGA fic than SG-1, even though I have love for characters on both sides of the galaxy. And you've managed to ping so many of the reasons I do love them, especially in that awesome mess hall scene. ♥

Date: 2006-01-21 10:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Thank you. I'm very new to SGA, being without cable and therefore a season behind. I swore up and down, backwards and forwards that I would never, ever watch SGA (I viewed it as a defection). *cough* Really eating my words now, aren't I?

It was John saying "I shot him" in Hide and Seek that got me. They're just such... boys.

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-21 07:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] katie-m.livejournal.com
Oh, I liked that a lot. Thank you.

Daniel knew that what they had was good. It was good for Jack, which meant it was good for the team, which meant it was good for the SGC, which—in logical progression—meant that it was good for the whole galaxy.

Ha! Yes, this is exactly how Daniel thinks. You've got him pegged.

Date: 2006-01-21 10:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Thank you. Yes, Daniel works his way from the microcosm and how it effects the macrocosm -- everything matters, and if they went by the evidence they would see [insert run-on sentence of epic proportions].

I love Daniel.

Icarus

Date: 2006-01-21 01:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vichka.livejournal.com
On "Jack hated serious. Serious meant bad news."
God, dammit! What's on that tape already? Great suspense :) Ok, gonna keep on reading :)
God damn it! YOOOOOUUUUU!!!! LOL *comes over to spank Icarus silly*

Date: 2006-01-21 10:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] icarusancalion.livejournal.com
Sorry, the General was just so reluctant to discuss it. Also, he was watching Jack very carefully to see his responses. Jack's instincts were right -- General Hammond would have known if he'd lied. Hammond was watching very carefully and hoping that a) what was on this tape wasn't true, and b) that Jack wouldn't lie to him about it. If he had, he would have lost a lot of respect in Hammond's eyes.

So, did you like it?

Icarus
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