Remix deadline!

[icarus]

I just finished my Remix fic, and let me tell you, it was like pulling teeth. The resulting story is... *frowns*

It needs a beta. Badly.

I had no chance to work on it before yesterday, so I picked an easy story to remix and then did a Namowrimo -- just type and keep typing till you hit the end.

Beta? Anyone? (She asked desperately.) It's SGA and has sex.

Comments

[20thcenturyvole.livejournal.com]

I can't promise I'll rip it to shreds and build it better faster stronger, but I'm a willing pair of eyes. My address is scumthecourtfool@hotmail.com - hit me, baby.

[icarusancalion.livejournal.com]

build it better faster stronger

If you do, I'll rename the story Steve Austen or somesuch. :D

It's on its way. Thank you.

Icarus

[20thcenturyvole.livejournal.com]

*bats it back* Oh God, I hope I was even vaguely helpful. I was certainly vague. But I really liked it, and it had some great lines!

[icarusancalion.livejournal.com]

Thank you, you've really perked up my confidence that there's something to salvage in the story.

I was certainly vague.

Er. The general gist was helpful, but I'm one of those people who needs to pointed to the exact problem: "Icarus. There. See that? That needs fleshing out." *presses nose closer* "Can you see the lack of adjectives, setting, and description? Yes-? Goood, Icarus, gooood."

Icarus

[20thcenturyvole.livejournal.com]

Well, that's... good. *weak smile* So, that version I e-mailed back - that's constructive, instead of hidiously picky and megalomaniacal and obnoxious? Because I think I may have gotten a teensy bit carried away with the bracketing and the bold-text.

[icarusancalion.livejournal.com]

Oh, this is what I was looking for: specifics. And I like how you ask questions to draw out the edits.

Icarus

[icarusancalion.livejournal.com]

I just finished extensive edits and a re-write of the entire second half. Both you and mad_maudlin saw the same structural problems that I did -- and saw something that I hadn't noticed: the lack of insight into what was going on in John's head in the second half. I realized why that was (I didn't buy the second half, personally) so I found a way to write the same thing in a way I believed it.

Hopefully you'll see this and have a final look sometime tonight. Because the changes I made were too radical to consider them beta'd at this point.

Icarus

[icarusancalion.livejournal.com]

Ah! I just got your email. Thank you very much.

*pops it open and sets to editing*

Icarus