Positive feedback.

[icarus]

Now this is my idea of a good review.

I really enjoyed reading this and would suggest it to all harry/snape shippers XD

My suggestions to the author -
~ a little more Snape development in earlier chapters so the reader can follow his progressive 'obsession' over Harry
~ the ending was perhaps a little overly dramatic, but I feel that a bit more snape development would allow the reader to sympathise with all angles of the situation and could even bring the reader to tears.

So in other words suggestion 2 wouldnt exist if it werent for suggestion 1.

Though dont take this as an insulting review. It really was a great story and very well written. Im just nit-picky. lol

This is the sort of review that's honest, positive, yet gives constructive feeback that I can really use. I hadn't considered that Snape's viewpoint hadn't been developed early enough, although I remember my beta had mentioned something along these lines. In 2003, I'd opted to stick with my structure of a strict Harry viewpoint up until the start of their relationship, at which point I alternated between Snape and Harry's POV. But you know, the reviewer has a point.

Three years later I'm not likely to edit it, and this was my second HP fanfic. There are a lot of things I'd change. But it's something to learn from. *nods*

Comments

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

See, now, that's a piece of feedback that, while it might not make everyone happy (being told your wee fic child isn't perfect is always a bittersweet moment) is darned kind and useful. May all such criticism for me come couched so nicely, too.

[icarusancalion.livejournal.com]

It's much easier to take on a popular story that you know has done well that you wrote three years ago, of course. That umbilical cord has been severed and you can look at it as "a story" now.

Icarus