Positive feedback.

[icarus]

Now this is my idea of a good review.

I really enjoyed reading this and would suggest it to all harry/snape shippers XD

My suggestions to the author -
~ a little more Snape development in earlier chapters so the reader can follow his progressive 'obsession' over Harry
~ the ending was perhaps a little overly dramatic, but I feel that a bit more snape development would allow the reader to sympathise with all angles of the situation and could even bring the reader to tears.

So in other words suggestion 2 wouldnt exist if it werent for suggestion 1.

Though dont take this as an insulting review. It really was a great story and very well written. Im just nit-picky. lol

This is the sort of review that's honest, positive, yet gives constructive feeback that I can really use. I hadn't considered that Snape's viewpoint hadn't been developed early enough, although I remember my beta had mentioned something along these lines. In 2003, I'd opted to stick with my structure of a strict Harry viewpoint up until the start of their relationship, at which point I alternated between Snape and Harry's POV. But you know, the reviewer has a point.

Three years later I'm not likely to edit it, and this was my second HP fanfic. There are a lot of things I'd change. But it's something to learn from. *nods*

Comments

[prillalar]

I always think it's so cool when people take the time to give useful crit. I know that I only want to do it on stories that I really like, so I hope that it means the same thing when people do it for me.

[icarusancalion.livejournal.com]

Same here. If the story was fun, but flawed, I don't take the time either.

You know what I've noticed? The people who take the time to give useful concrit are almost always new to a fandom or an archive. I checked and sure enough, this was only her fourth post on Fiction Alley.

Icarus